Story: Corona Blaze (Update Part 5!)

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Author: Benman

Description: A crisis turns Princess Celestia into the tyrant Corona Blaze, and she calls forth everlasting day! With Twilight Sparkle missing, how can the other Elements of Harmony hope to put things right?

Corona Blaze Part 1
Corona Blaze Part 2
Corona Blaze Part 3
Corona Blaze Part 4
Corona Blaze Part 5 (New!)

Additional Tags: Suspense, Action, Drama, Struggle, Redemption

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61 Responses to Story: Corona Blaze (Update Part 5!)

  1. Anonymous says:

    Very interesting concept. I'll be reading this one asap.

  2. Anonymous says:

    Very interesting concept. I'll be reading this one asap.

  3. StreakTheFox says:

    Easy, replace twilight with trixie!

  4. StreakTheFox says:

    Easy, replace twilight with trixie!

  5. StreakTheFox says:

    O_O dude I was just joking in my other comment… and after looking at the tags, I didn't know it was for real! LOL! xD

  6. StreakTheFox says:

    O_O dude I was just joking in my other comment… and after looking at the tags, I didn't know it was for real! LOL! xD

  7. Anonymous says:

    Has there been a story like this before??? I don't think so… What the hell took so long?

  8. Anonymous says:

    Has there been a story like this before??? I don't think so… What the hell took so long?

  9. Roman500 says:

    Eternal day? Sounds like the other six months in Alaska.

  10. Roman500 says:

    Eternal day? Sounds like the other six months in Alaska.

  11. aramaru says:

    Very interesting.. I was wondering how Celestia would "go evil" when she doesn't seem to have a wicked bone in her body; but twisting her protectiveness to be overbearing? That works for a villian, certainly.

  12. aramaru says:

    Very interesting.. I was wondering how Celestia would "go evil" when she doesn't seem to have a wicked bone in her body; but twisting her protectiveness to be overbearing? That works for a villian, certainly.

  13. Kyle says:

    … Hm, normally I utterly hate things that paint Celestia as a tyrant, but…This works. The explanation for Nightmare Moon and Corona Blaze work. The reasons why they're sealed away make sense, and the reason Celestia had for giving in? That works as well.Alright Benman, I'm interested. We'll see where this goes.

  14. Kyle says:

    … Hm, normally I utterly hate things that paint Celestia as a tyrant, but…This works. The explanation for Nightmare Moon and Corona Blaze work. The reasons why they're sealed away make sense, and the reason Celestia had for giving in? That works as well.Alright Benman, I'm interested. We'll see where this goes.

  15. ZAquanimus says:

    WHATISTHISIDONTEVEN.My super long fic that ive been working on for a month and havnt submitted yet due to lack of editting…gah, *changes name of tyrant celestia for the 3rd time*

  16. ZAquanimus says:

    WHATISTHISIDONTEVEN.My super long fic that ive been working on for a month and havnt submitted yet due to lack of editting…gah, *changes name of tyrant celestia for the 3rd time*

  17. Grif says:

    The inclusion of Trixie seemed a little tacked on to be honest. But okay, it's an interesting premise. We'll see how this goes.

  18. Grif says:

    The inclusion of Trixie seemed a little tacked on to be honest. But okay, it's an interesting premise. We'll see how this goes.

  19. Gosh dangit, I've been working on a story for months, and it's about…yup, tyrant Celestia (with "Corona" in her name, to boot D: ). Oh well, I'm still posting mine as-is, but I'll definitely check this story out, as well.

  20. Gosh dangit, I've been working on a story for months, and it's about…yup, tyrant Celestia (with "Corona" in her name, to boot D: ). Oh well, I'm still posting mine as-is, but I'll definitely check this story out, as well.

  21. Anonymous says:

    Want your story to be awesome? Add Great and Powerful Trixie!

  22. Anonymous says:

    Want your story to be awesome? Add Great and Powerful Trixie!

  23. Anonymous says:

    Okay, the old castle was supposed to be the sister's first castle. And wasn't it supposed to have been abandoned just after Luna turned into Nightmare Moon?Setting that aside, why would Celestia need to "explore" or "search" a building she literally grew up in, or possibly even had built?

  24. Anonymous says:

    Okay, the old castle was supposed to be the sister's first castle. And wasn't it supposed to have been abandoned just after Luna turned into Nightmare Moon?Setting that aside, why would Celestia need to "explore" or "search" a building she literally grew up in, or possibly even had built?

  25. Anonymous says:

    @Anonymousits possible shes never been in that specific chamber? magic dangerous to alicorns and all.im confident that the story will take care of all those loopholes in the future

  26. Anonymous says:

    @Anonymousits possible shes never been in that specific chamber? magic dangerous to alicorns and all.im confident that the story will take care of all those loopholes in the future

  27. Anonymous says:

    Corona Blaze is the only psychotic alicorn dictator that's also a Corona!

  28. Anonymous says:

    Corona Blaze is the only psychotic alicorn dictator that's also a Corona!

  29. A story about Celestia's tyrannical alter ego known as Corona Blaze?Sir, you have my attention.

  30. A story about Celestia's tyrannical alter ego known as Corona Blaze?Sir, you have my attention.

  31. Minalkra says:

    uhm, i like the characterization of Celestial's alter-ego and the reason she let her out, though would Celestia threaten Equestria to save her student? uhm, but it's really well done.the Trixie thing. uhm, sorry. i don't like it. as much as i can see the mane six doing something like that in many other cases, i think the over-riding need in this case would, well, override their distrust of Trixie. uhm, she may be a braggart and a fool but she does know show business and that's what essentially a distraction is. but i'm sure they'll come around and Trixie will be welcomed and maybe taught a lesson on lying as well, becoming a better pony as a result. if that's what you're going for, i mean. uhm, sorry …

  32. Minalkra says:

    uhm, i like the characterization of Celestial's alter-ego and the reason she let her out, though would Celestia threaten Equestria to save her student? uhm, but it's really well done.the Trixie thing. uhm, sorry. i don't like it. as much as i can see the mane six doing something like that in many other cases, i think the over-riding need in this case would, well, override their distrust of Trixie. uhm, she may be a braggart and a fool but she does know show business and that's what essentially a distraction is. but i'm sure they'll come around and Trixie will be welcomed and maybe taught a lesson on lying as well, becoming a better pony as a result. if that's what you're going for, i mean. uhm, sorry …

  33. Melodia says:

    I normally hate 'Tyrant Celestia' stories but without the Grimdark tag, combined with the implication that it was something external, I decided to give it a shot. Certainly interesting, though I agree that Trixie felt kinda tacked on unless she appears later too.

  34. Melodia says:

    I normally hate 'Tyrant Celestia' stories but without the Grimdark tag, combined with the implication that it was something external, I decided to give it a shot. Certainly interesting, though I agree that Trixie felt kinda tacked on unless she appears later too.

  35. Anonymous says:

    Corona blaze is just redundant and ugly for a name, empress solaria still sounds better.

  36. Anonymous says:

    Corona blaze is just redundant and ugly for a name, empress solaria still sounds better.

  37. Daniel says:

    Okay, Corona Blaze sounds a LOT better than the name I came up with, Eclipsor Sun

  38. Daniel says:

    Okay, Corona Blaze sounds a LOT better than the name I came up with, Eclipsor Sun

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  41. SomeGuy says:

    A story about an evil Celestia that is not grimdark, this has my attention. I am liking it so far, the explanation of the primal side of alicorns and how Corona Blaze is the twisted prevention of Celestia's motherly nature, the same way Nightmare Moon was of Luna's desire to be loved and appreciated. I was surprised that the other ponies did not include Trixie in their plan. Trixie would make an excellent distraction, and keeping Corona Blaze distracted will help them. Maybe she will come in later and act as a distraction later (even though the others did not want it) and they realize that they should have been more forgiving of Trixie. She brought the group of refugees because only wanted to give ponies hope.

  42. SomeGuy says:

    A story about an evil Celestia that is not grimdark, this has my attention. I am liking it so far, the explanation of the primal side of alicorns and how Corona Blaze is the twisted prevention of Celestia's motherly nature, the same way Nightmare Moon was of Luna's desire to be loved and appreciated. I was surprised that the other ponies did not include Trixie in their plan. Trixie would make an excellent distraction, and keeping Corona Blaze distracted will help them. Maybe she will come in later and act as a distraction later (even though the others did not want it) and they realize that they should have been more forgiving of Trixie. She brought the group of refugees because only wanted to give ponies hope.

  43. Anonymous says:

    Overly Protective Princess Pony

  44. Anonymous says:

    Overly Protective Princess Pony

  45. Why do I have the nagging feeling that Trixie is going to sell them out?

  46. Why do I have the nagging feeling that Trixie is going to sell them out?

  47. @AnonymousProbably has to do with the fact that she has amped-up powers due to her primal side.@BenmanGah, I can't wait to find out what happens next! Your story really has me on edge.

  48. Anonymous says:

    Hmm, just reading the first chapter, and it already felt like this story started on the wrong foot. I'm gonna continue reading, hopefully it will get better.

  49. Anonymous says:

    The first few chapters go way too fast. It would have been nice to actually have a buildup to it, not just "suddenly Celestia turns evil".

  50. Anonymous says:

    Trixie and Cobb's conflict was rather weak and…well, kinda stupid for just the reasons Trixie said (also implies that AJ is stretching the truth a bit for less then good motives.) Rings of manufactured rather than natural conflict.Most of the scenes are really lacking in set-up and context. Far too many things happen off-stage and between scenes, makes it read like a movie someone's nodding off during.

  51. Matariel says:

    I liked how matter-of-factly Corona Blaze dispatched the pegasus who was loyal to Luna, it's good to see that like with Luna and Nightmare Moon, there's nothing of Celestia holding Corona Blaze back

  52. Great job with the latest chapter. Nice change of pace from all the fighting and adventure, although I'm guessing the peace will be short lived for ponyville. Corona is a very interesting character. Hellbent on a bloodless rule, she had to be pushed very far to use violence against her guardsponies. Now they've forced her hand and she's become even more dangerous. Although making Braeburn captain is a bit silly. He's too reasonable. "Braeburn, call off you soldiers so we can restore the day-night cycle.""Oh okay."

  53. @Anonymoushave to agree that Cob's fight with Trix was kind of lacklusterher friendship with RBD was well done though, playing on Dash's loyalty

  54. artrcland says:

    Just finished the first four parts and have enjoyed it so far!!I was worried during the last chapter that everypony was taking things a little to easy upon their return to Ponyville.I was expecting to see Corona Blaze come crashinginto the library screaming…. I'll GET YOU, MY PRETTY, AND YOUR LITTLE DRAGON TOO!Looking forward to future updates.Thanks

  55. Melodia says:

    Chapter 4 was so much more…mediocre… compared to the first three chapters, I's almost wonder if they were the same author.No idea what it is…just it seems so…I dunno…blasé.

  56. Anonymous says:

    I like it! I like all of it actually, except for Trixie's "romance" with what's-his-name. That feels a little tacked on. But otherwise, it's really nice.

  57. Neferius says:

    This could probably be the most accurate depiction of Princess Luna I have yet to encounter.Of-course no one can truly be sure until Season 2 arrives, but somehow this representation of her seems …natural. She acts in a strict and firm manner befitting a royalty, and her character even resembles what we've seen so far of Nightmare Moon, minus the psychosis of course.

  58. Uther says:

    Get part 5 done already (Don't reach out a unfinished product, take your time). I want to see what happens next

  59. TenchiFreak5 says:

    Its not the most flawless story I've ever read (there are some bits that really could use more setup than they are given), and some scenes do seem to be added to the pile of conflict purely for adding more conflict, but overall I like the concepts you are hashing out here.In particular, the Corona Blaze character is really interesting from how she has been written so far.

  60. @TenchiFreak5Agreed. Tyrannical because she wants to protect everyone? Color me interested.

  61. Anonymous says:

    Corona's actions seem to conflict with her personality. If she executed an officer for failing to seize Luna even though that officer was horribly outnumbered and outgunned, then why not kill Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash while she had the chance and was clearly with her power to? With even one of the Elements gone, she would reign unopposed. It seems to be a blatant shielding of the protagonist on the authors part.Good story nonetheless, but this issue really stuck out in my mind whilst reading.

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