Story: Don’t Let the Sun Catch You Crying (Update Part 5!)

[Shipping] It’s labeled shipping, but isn’t really that shippy!

Author: l0x0r

Description: AU. Twilight Sparkle travels to Canterlot to investigate why Princess Celestia has been acting distant lately. Faced with a harsh discovery, she finds a new friend in Princess Luna. But can their new friendship survive Luna’s insecurities?

Don’t Let the Sun Catch You Crying (All Links) (New! Chapter 5)

Additional Tags: Distressed Twilight Sparkle, Sympathetic Luna

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51 Responses to Story: Don’t Let the Sun Catch You Crying (Update Part 5!)

  1. Shmoogy says:

    i approve of this story and that picture

  2. TenchiFreak5 says:

    You perfectly captured the nervousness that Twilight feels around Celestia when she thinks she had done something wrong.

  3. l0x0r says:

    You want shipping? You'll get shipping. Just for you I'll write a sequel and it's going to ship Luna and Twilight so hard that you'll think you're on the Edmund Fitzgerald.

  4. Anonymous says:

    I like shipping, but this particular story might have been better served without the undertones of it. I would get rid of it in this story and put it in the sequel after they've gotten to know each other better.

  5. Shmoogy says:

    but the edmund fitzgerald sunk 😦 i dont wanna sink IM GOIN TO THE LOVE BOAT

  6. A pleasant read. It made me feel… nice. Consider this comment as indicative of my tentative approval.

  7. Kyle says:

    The shipping elements were almost nonexistent in this chapter, which isn't necessarily a bad thing. I think you got the reaction that Twilight would have at Celestia getting another student pretty much nailed down, but I hope this distance thing won't keep up. I don't think Twilight would ever really stay upset or feel distant from Celestia, a new student notwithstanding.

  8. Acrianna says:

    I really liked it, but I would have used a [normal] tag as well. Luna and Twilight should stay friends and that's what they are in this story, at least that's how I like to interpret it. Not that I mind the Luna/Twilight shipping stories, they're fun too, but this story just had a bit more realism to it than some other Luna/Twilight stories.

  9. Paul says:

    Oh my. That was really touching. I don't believe the shipping tag was needed because it wasn't truly shipping as much as friendship stuff. I actually love this with how they depicted Luna and Twilight. I feel that this a tad episodic. It was a really nice plot and a really nice deliverance.

  10. Yes, that's how Twilight might very well react initially to Celestia taking on a new student! Loved your descriptions of Luna and her room, and the moonrise scene on the balcony was really well done and beautiful. Very fine work!

  11. ZAquanimus says:

    Luna's room is such win.

  12. NinesTempest says:

    That was almost moving. A kind, personal story of Twilight dealing with not being the most loved of Celestia's students is something we, I think, should see more of. And this one was done all too well.I also laughed when Twilight woke up to see Luna next to her, haha.A great mix of both showing events and telling emotions that I don't think enough fics use (worse fics tend to tell too much, and many fics show a lot more, but this did both, I think, perfectly). Paced well, great descriptions of every room, and you captured every awkward Twilight moment perfectly.I only wish this could be an episode.

  13. This demands a sequel!

  14. I've just had the pleasure of reading this delightful story, and I must say I am deeply impressed.Little Luna is so adorable in this piece, I really like how the author characterised her. As a matter of fact, I really like them all. If the author ever comes by here, I hope he/she sees my thanks for this lovely piece of work.

  15. Anonymous says:

    I don't know if you're joking or not, but PLEASE do a sequel to this. Or, as Rarity put it… Please, please, PLEEEASE!

  16. Anonymous says:

    I forgot that I read this already on ff.net and when I saw it here I got my hopes up thinking this was a second chapter.Good to know I'm not the only one who wouldn't mind seeing more, it really is a great fic.

  17. Anonymous says:

    Very solid writing. My only problem was in the library scene, I felt as though the dialogue was a little descriptive for someone who is crying. I can imagine that it would hard to make out complete sentences in that type of situation.

  18. Nyoko says:

    I thought this was a beautifully written scene, and despite one or two spelling errors and comma usages that I don't think are worth getting angsty about, this was one of the best stories I've read with Luna in it. Fully deserves the five-star I gave it. Keep up the good work!

  19. Anonymous says:

    I didn't find it too shippy; more warmly awkward. Personally, I found it funny and heart-warming. What a great little fic.

  20. La Barata says:

    Say it with me, folks – D'AWWWWWWW ^^

  21. Dionysus says:

    That was a cute story, I hope there will be sequels !I want to read how Luna meets all of the other Ponys !

  22. Tast says:

    Adorably done. The use of "crack" to describe what Twilight felt in her "heart" struck me as an extremely apt term. However, nopony seems to have wondered over what I'M wondering… How will Celestia feel about Twilight not "worshiping" her now? Perhaps in the sequel — please do a sequel — we will see Celestia's side of the same predicament and she will confide in Luna who will realize that Celestia and Twilight are having the same problem. Hopefully she can fix all the moments that make me [Sad]… I don't like being [Sad], it makes me feel things.

  23. Anonymous says:

    Very sweet, very well written story. Everypony was in character and it tugged at all the right heart strings.Bravo good sir, I await the sequel with baited breath.

  24. Lupinator says:

    Lul, Celestia got replaced.Seriously though man, I think you are my fav writer on this site me. I 5-star enjoy everything you've made thus far, and I am a man of stupidly high standards.I also like how you link your stories together in small ways, too. Keep up the good art. P.S.You also need a Deviantart or something so I can fav your stuff.

  25. Kujiiro says:

    A very good, lengthy story. My heart melted a couple times (and then exploded twice). I was severely craving more bed action, but that's just my train of thought, and I'm satisfied with how everything played out. 5 stars from me!Also, I can't help but look at that picture and think, "-and then Luna pooped the universe."

  26. Anonymous says:

    Awesome read. Needs normal tag. I hope you don't make the sequel heavy shipping like you said you would though. I would like to read more of this but I stay away from shipping.

  27. One can never have too much Twilight and Luna, even if it is just tooth-rotting fluff.Good show.

  28. Fachsenbude says:

    What does the final sentence:"De profundis clamo ad te Celestia" mean?

  29. Reid says:

    3 words: moar…MOAR!..&Please? Also, Twilight X Luna is my fav. Keep it up!

  30. Anonymous says:

    It was the perfect amount of shipping.No sex.Just cuddlingand Luna.This may have beenthe best storyI ever read.

  31. l0x0r says:

    @FachsenbudeMy French is better than my Latin, so the sentence might be off, but it translates to something like;"Out of the depths I cry to you, Celestia"Also, thanks everyone who liked this story. Sadly I am a slow writer, so the continuation probably will take a while. It's sometimes problematic when you write your rough drafts on bar napkins.

  32. Fachsenbude says:

    @l0x0rThx for translation.And take your time, Haste makes waste.

  33. reynard61 says:

    I love it!!! Epic Awesome!!! (I'm beginning to think that there's no such thing as bad Lunafic. Praise Celestia I hope I'm right…)

  34. Anonymous says:

    I'd wait forever for a sequel. This is literary gold.

  35. Anonymous says:

    dont ship them TOO much to where it ruins the good quality πŸ˜€ it could use a little more but not like vigorous sex, maybe something to where it wont take away this LITERARY MASTERPIECE's quality

  36. Anonymous says:

    dont ship them TOO much to where it ruins the good quality πŸ˜€ it could use a little more but not like vigorous sex, maybe something to where it wont take away this LITERARY MASTERPIECE's quality

  37. Mattheq says:

    I *do* want the shipping, go for it.

  38. Mattheq says:

    I *do* want the shipping, go for it.

  39. i like πŸ™‚ i demand moar.

  40. i like πŸ™‚ i demand moar.

  41. Casper says:

    D'aaaaawwwww Twilight/Luna is so cute! I demand more! 5 stars!

  42. Casper says:

    D'aaaaawwwww Twilight/Luna is so cute! I demand more! 5 stars!

  43. Ace12541 says:

    I think i said Awww in real life when Luna was cuddling Twi, just so cute! ^-^

  44. Anonymous says:

    I agree that keep it cute, but maybe do put some, pure love into it, maybe more like I won't let you go, but really just do what you want lol!

  45. Anonymous says:

    Would be nice for an update…

  46. Kayriel says:

    Why hast thou forsaken us? D:

  47. l0x0r says:

    @KayrielI'm a slow writer. Very slow. In order to guarantee the quality of my writing I have to whittle my pens out of obsolete server ram, mix my ink made up of my tears and the ashes of my past dreams, and collect enough toilet paper rolls with the last vestiges of paper clinging to them for something to write on.But the next chapter is close to completion, and should be out within the next week or so. Of course you'll probably speed read through it in ten minutes or so. But hey, c'est la vie.

  48. Anonymous says:

    @l0x0rThat was the best comment I've read all day, anywhere.

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