Story: One Last Quest (Update Complete!)

[Adventure] Cheerilee! The best earth pony.

Author: Vanner

Description: Princess Celestia sends four adults ponies out into the world. They find that just because it’s not your destiny to save the world, doesn’t mean a goddess won’t ask you to do just that.

One Last Quest Part 1
One Last Quest Part 2
One Last Quest Part 3
One Last Quest Part 4
One Last Quest Part 5
One Last Quest Part 6
One Last Quest Part 7
One Last Quest Part 8
One Last Quest Part 9
One Last Quest Part 10
One Last Quest Part 11
One Last Quest Part 12
One Last Quest Part 13
One Last Quest Part 14
One Last Quest Part 15 (New!)
One Last Quest Epilogue (New!)


Additional Tags: Adventure, Destiny, Understanding, Persistence, Bravery

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60 Responses to Story: One Last Quest (Update Complete!)

  1. Anonymous says:

    Part 4 link don't work…

  2. Link 4 doesn't seem to be working correctly.

  3. Chapter 4 links to Blogger…

  4. Bronode says:

    Salvation! When I saw this had been updated I was about to kiss goodbye to the couple of remaining hours I have to sleep before I have to be up for work. Now I have an excuse to go to bed!I'm very aware that I never needed an excuse to allow certain vital physiological processes before poni came along… I'm not sure how I should feel about that.

  5. Havokpony says:

    So, the first three chapters were neat, but after reading 4 and 5 I can't say if I'll read the rest. This seems to rapidly deteriorating into a grimdark-war and tyrant-celestia fic.

  6. Vanner says:

    There's no grim-dark here, I promise. This is as dark as it gets.

  7. Havokpony says:

    @VannerThen I await the next chapter with curiosity as to how you will bounce the mood back from some pretty extreme violence and death and some rather hardcore fantasy racism.

  8. Ace12541 says:

    Finally someone who likes Cheerilee as much as i do ^-^

  9. Anonymous says:

    Erm, why was "Rarity" in ch5? It looked like a typo, but it completely threw me off for the rest of the story.

  10. Yikes. This looks like it's tempting a [Sad] tag… but I can think of a way to recover, and it involves finding a Stone of Brilliance.

  11. Bronode says:

    @AnonymousRead it again. Rarity's on the front cover of a magazine, she isn't actually there. Easy mistake to make I guess; I too was thrown for the briefest instant.Now, if this is as grimdark as it gets I can take that as a pretty strong indicator that Medley's gonna make it. I swear, you authors. Making me care about background ponies and them making them suffer.Still, I would have liked to see the kind of work a righteously enraged Pokey could put in on Celestia if Medley had bought it and he got close enough to use his horn on her.Wait… the last part of that last sentence just went somewhere horrible.

  12. And things get better, and then livelier. Oh, this should be good

  13. Havokpony says:

    I dunno. I'm still interested, but the deus-ex-machina kinda hurts. While I can understand it, after all these are gods whom walk amongst their people, it kinda leaves a bad taste. If the goddesses can do this basically at will, why do they not all the time? Why not take risks in the names of Cele/Luna if they can appear and heal you instantly from otherwise most likely fatal wounds. What kind of harsh, uncaring dieties are they if they do not do such things? By giving the pair such infinite power beyond their celestial domains it raises a lot of issues.That said, you do do plenty of things right, I like Medley's newfound boldness and sense of purpose, being saved buy a goddess would do that. I like all your central characters.I'm just affraid of the bucket of worms you opened with the deus ex machina.

  14. Bronalex says:

    She's cute for teacher =)

  15. Ekevoo says:

    I agree… it was a Deus Ex Machina, and they always hurt… but it was one of the best well done DEM that I've ever seen. It felt right into place too, with very adequate amounts of foreshadowing, and true significance to the characters' evolution. If there's a right way to pull it, that is it.I feel the story missed a moment between Medley being told she was being put into a bus, uh, I mean, train, and her actually being there. The evolution of her decisions and whatnot. That part of the story really surprised me in a good way, but I felt that between her waking up and fleeing from the train it was too quick.Other than that, I love the new chapters. All the characters are being great. I feel Cherilee is getting a little less attention than the others, but she did have her spotlight previously.Great story! Keep it up! 🙂

  16. Anonymous says:

    Pokey is a BAMFbest male pony ever… Doctor Whoo?

  17. Vanner says:

    @EkevooCheerilee gets to shine for the last six chapters or so, so don't worry!Oh, yeah, I'm done writing it. Did I mention that?

  18. Randon says:

    Is there a reason that Cheerilee is referred to by half the color spectrum in the fourth and fifth parts? I know she was called both red and white at different times and never by her true color in those parts. It just struck me as odd is all.

  19. Anonymous says:

    Medley is like a little pegasus Chuck Norris … that is all.Threaten kids? ROUNDHOUSE KICK TO THE FACE!

  20. Allicorn says:

    Still enjoying this a lot, but "drug" really isn't the past tense of "drag"! A few other spello/typos too. Give your proof reader a stern hoof up the hindquarters 😉

  21. Anonymous says:

    I'm noticing a repetitive error where you mix up character names, and the actual mix-up is so terrible that it's not even an understandable typo. You have replaced Redheart's name with Medley's while Medley is split off from the group, or one of those donkey characters is briefly said to be Rarity. It just doesn't make sense to me how prereaders couldn't catch those.

  22. This story has stayed relatively under the radar, and I find that a bit sad. It's a very interesting take, and a reminder that the mane 6 are not the only ponies in Equestria who can make a difference. In their own little ways these ordinary citizens are changing the world for the better, a kind reminder that everypony can be capable of greatness, even if they're not the "heroes" we typically expect.On a side note: I figured that red stuff was going become relevant, sooner or later.-Moonlight Ballad, Bard of Equestria

  23. Vanner says:

    @AnonymousI've noticed a considerable amount of errors myself, and I've since switched my method of proofing that is more time consuming, but produces a better product. That said, I don't have a proofreader, and once a story is posted, it no longer goes through prereading. The errors are all my own, and I apologize. Now that I've got the story finished, I'll go back and do the long form proofreading method I've been taught this week. Future chapters should be error proof, I hope.

  24. @AnonymousActually, that Rarity thing tripped me up at first, too. But if you read it more carefully, it says that Rarity is on the cover of the magazine the Donkey character is reading.This is a great story overall, it is quite well-written, and I like where it's going.

  25. banjo2E says:

    Rule #1 of dealing with women: Do not piss off the maternal instincts.Rule #2 of dealing with women: DO NOT PISS OFF THE MATERNAL INSTINCTS.

  26. Ekevoo says:

    @VannerYou sound pretty relieved to have already finished the story. 🙂 How many chapters at the end?

  27. Anonymous says:

    Pokey… know it all too well. :(I never really liked any of the male ponies before, but the way you've written Pokey. He seems like a real bro.

  28. 'Prancing Crimps'. I lawled. XD Was that intentional?Been enjoying this story so far. I'm really liking the development you've given them all. Medley's one of the lesser-known background ponies, and it's interesting to see her given such attention to detail.Am looking forward to reading the rest!

  29. Anonymous says:

    Fantastic read, I hope there is more Cheerilee in future chapters 🙂

  30. Jett says:

    @Conner CogworkI was thinking the same thing. It's nice to see that Fanfiction writers not only make slight nods to specific episodes to the show, but maybe even slight nods to other fanfics. Helps me figure out what I should believe, since I read so many fanfics that usually have different theories about similar characters

  31. Anonymous says:

    Well, I liked it. Very well done, indeed; emotional without being trite or sappy, violent without reveling unnecessarily in gore, and filled with interesting characters. Take my 5s.

  32. Vanner says:

    @Conner CogworkYup, Fully intentional. Crimps and Prance is one of my favorite fan fics.

  33. Allicorn says:

    Yippee! I was just about to explode (possibly twice) and there came the next episode just in time! Great stuff Vanner.

  34. Anonymous says:

    Well dear author, since you has given us this awesome story, i will give you five stars in return 🙂

  35. Happy to see this updated, and I love the new cover art.

  36. Jetfire says:

    I have continued to read this story, and it continues to impress me. You've built some very interesting characters in these four ponies. They are, as their age suggests, grown-up. They are complicated and frustrating at times, they do stupid things, they're jealous and occasionally petty, along with being sarcastic. Yet they are also brave, determined, and kind. They are simultaneously the best and the worst. If you'll pardon the expression, they are human.I'll be sad to see Redheart leave. I feel like she was the mediating influence on the group. Cheerilee has a similar effect, but she's also somewhat excitable and prone to overreaction. Medley is inexperienced, though she's grown quite a bit, and Pokey is ferocious. Redheart was the one who kept them all in check, and I'll be interested to see how their personalities flare without her. I am very glad to see Medley back. I really like the idea of a mother being a badass, and Medley is almost as badass as Pokey at this point.Bravo and encore.

  37. Anonymous says:

    Dear lord this is awesome.

  38. Enrique262 says:

    I have to admit, every time I saw this story I avoided it, didn't think it was worth it, but oh boy if i was wrong! I simply love the whole setup of it, the characters you use, that being background ponies for the most part you actually made them into quite the competent ones, and their whole adventure, its been simply amazing! Congratulations for such an amazing work, and for now on I will be looking forward to new chapters!

  39. blindferret says:

    Cheerilee's face = awesome.

  40. Anonymous says:

    There are so many tags this story deserves.I'm kind of disappointed Spike didn't go with them.I've only read up to Chapter 5, but my bed beckons. I shall read more in le morning, mayhapsing.

  41. Anonymous says:

    I like the pic for Cheerilee wearing the awesome face 😀

  42. Vanner says:

    @EkevooSixteen plus an epilogue. So, really, only 4 more updates!

  43. Anonymous says:

    I'm very sorry, but every time I read "kin of Luna" I can't help but cringe.

  44. Wraithwood says:

    once again a great chapter. though, there was one scene that was a little jarring. at the end of this chapter (Ch12) when they were riding the elevator down there was no descriptor of them ever getting off the elevator so when Cheerilee started going though index cabinet it seemed like an odd jump to me. other then that, great story so far 🙂

  45. Anonymous says:

    I skipped this when it started, but gave a go yesterday and I'm loving every moment. Eagerly awaiting more chapters.

  46. Bronode says:

    Oh dear, Pokey, what are you planning?I have a very bad feeling about what will happen when this burned-out samurai with an insanely sharp "sword" and nothing left to lose meets back up with a goddess he hates, and who, as of chapter 12 seems to have trolled them yet again.

  47. Nightsong says:

    Only 91 comments? Really? I think this story is AMAZING! It definitely deserves more credit and publicity than it gets currently. At least, in my opinion it does. It's been written well, as it's easy to get attached to the characters. (That, and the humor is great too! XD)

  48. Anonymous says:

    Wow, this is definitely updating quickly (which is appreciated!!)Thoroughly enjoying it, keep up the great work 😀

  49. Blueblood takes a gauntlet to the face! Classic cartoon move. I laughed so loudly at that, I almost woke up my kid.-Moonlight Ballad, Bard of Equestria

  50. Hhm… It's good. Very good. But it's not the best it could be which is why I can't give it a full five stars. You do good with giving all the characters a history and back story but some of it feels rushed or incomplete or pointless. The last three chapters in particular felt like the scenes were going too fast and that they should have settled more than they did, some of the additional details feel a little pointless like Pokey being Trixie's brother, it just doesn't seem to add anything, and things like the situation between Redheart and Pokey had no foreshadowing that I could see, I'd have figured they would have acted more familiar with each other than they did. It also seems weird that Redheart just abandoned their quest, because she already learned that if the quest fails then it could mean everyone dieing, it makes more sense for her to go with them and come back once the world is saved.But that's the thing, don't think I hate this, the fact that you've got me interested in this so much that I wish you put even more into it is something to be proud of after all. Hope you keep it up!

  51. JR says:

    Finally took the plunge and read this. It's pretty darn good. A few missteps like not telegraphing the relationship between Redheart and Pokey early enough, ad having Redheart leave the group before the quest was resolved. You also overplayed the "Running into someone from their past life" card just a bit. It may have a different feel if you're reading a chapter at a time as it gets updated, but reading through 13 chapters all in one go kind of emphasizes the fact that they're constantly running into old friends no matter which way they turn.But setting those minor quibbles aside, it's a strong story with a good structure. I like all the characters and look forward to reading the climax of the tale.

  52. Anonymous says:

    A certain pony (after trying to deal with a certain Cheat) is going to try something very stupid agains a very powerful pony.

  53. Love the Cheerilee awesome face.

  54. dustykat says:

    Damnit! Every Fic I'm reading now updates….ALL OF THEM!!!! *I can count to books!*

  55. Anonymous says:

    Make Blueblood die. Now.

  56. Anonymous says:

    @dustykatOn the bright side, F:E hasn't updated today.I might get some tiny amount of work done, maybe!

  57. Anonymous says:

    The poor grammar ensured that I didn't get past chapter 1.

  58. Sotha says:

    I second the notion about a certain cheat getting what's coming to him. Revenge I say!

  59. Vanner says:

    @SothaOh yes, indeed. Dance my puppets for the final two chapters are coming, hopefully tonight. Thanks all for reading, and I hope I spent your time well.

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