Story: Twilight vs Winter


Author: JR

Description: Twilight finds that in the heart of winter she’s slipping back into her shell. When she decides to get out and see her friends despite the weather, things don’t go as planned.

Twilight vs Winter

Additional Tags: Winter. Loneliness, funny, friendship, Learning.

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38 Responses to Story: Twilight vs Winter

  1. I love the dry humor in this.

  2. Anonymous says:

    I was most amused.

  3. Anonymous says:

    A little simplistic but sometimes simple is good. Which this was. The letter to Celestia at the end didn't quite feel like Twilight's writing style but other than that nitpick it was all good.

  4. Anonymous says:

    I love you Seth.Also, reading story.

  5. Hio590 says:

    Yay random comedies!

  6. Nintyuk says:

    Note to author, the letter to celestia seems kinda dumb instead just remove it and add in a hint that she wrote one. Or try to sum up the story's morals in a less blunt way because the current one is far to short and isn't much of a life lesson.Otherwise the story is rather good, short concise and in character.

  7. musicssound says:

    "Wait, lemme try something…Yup, just as I thought." Winter doesn't like ponies messing around outside with the help of the sun goddess. And Rainbow Dash is insane.

  8. Anonymous says:

    This could almost be an episode.

  9. Sebiale says:

    @musicssoundYeah, does anyone have a clue what was going on with the shifting wind directions there?

  10. Anonymous says:

    The letter at the end was somewhat odd. Otherwise, its short and sweet.

  11. Anonymous says:

    Very simple indeed, but I think that's its charm. No over-analyzing, no drama, just Twilight wanting some company and finally receiving it. Adorkable!

  12. Very much episode material. That letter needs some work though.

  13. Lindil says:

    I am going to 5-star it. Sure, there are better stories – longer, more complicated, well though-out OC ponies etc. But this one has what I needed in a long time – simple, short and happy story, not unlike a MLP episode. It more or less share the qualities that draw me to the show, and I certainly needed some respite from the grimdark/sad stuff in other fanfictions I read. So, even with the glaring lack of The Great and Powerful Trixie in the story I am giving it the highest mark:)

  14. Anonymous says:

    Regarding wind directions: I think Twilight was checking if the wind was always blowing straight in her face regardles of where she was looking – and it was (because winter hates her)

  15. Yeah, the letter at the end seemed kind of out of place. Come to think of it, the whole ending seemed kind of saccharine. Still, the humor that infected the rest of the story, particularly the opening pages, more than makes up for the somewhat weak ending.

  16. Ekevoo says:

    Didn't find it all that funny, but it was an enjoyable little story. Identified with it quite a bit, good pace, and good characters. The ending was a bit forced, but it's what you'd expect from a normal episode anyway. I like it. :3

  17. Solarn says:

    "Quantum Thaumaturgical Wave Functions,Narrative Convenience, and Their Effect on the Failure Rate of Mass TeleportationSpells" Nice. And I just read On A Cross And Arrow, too.

  18. *reads the description of Twilight discovering what winter is like*You've wintered in Wisconsin, haven't you?

  19. Anonymous says:

    I really liked the dry humor from Twi. She is always my favorite pony, and her I feel like you captured one of my favored facets of her personality. Good story, author, bravo.

  20. Cloudy Skies says:

    I have just read episode 27 of MLP:FiM, and I feel happy.Thank you!

  21. Anonymous says:

    aw, that was a good episode

  22. This story made me chuckle, for which I am grateful. It seems like there's an overabundance of grimdark/ overly serious stuff recently, so a good, silly story like this one is much appreciated.Special mention goes to the title of the book Twilight was sleeping on, the wind joke, and sharpening cows.More please!

  23. Anonymous says:

    This does have the feel of an actual episode, with the cheerful humor and buildup around a central lesson. It's also short and sweet. All you have to do is mend the fourth wall a bit and you're ready to animate.

  24. Twix says:

    The ending felt a bit weak, but the story was fun, about the right length, and kept me chuckling the whole time. Well done!

  25. You…why…PDF?Why…WHY would you post a [self-censored quite heavily] PDF?!?!?! There's no reason other than to guarantee to lose some of your potential audience before they can even look at it. PDFs are damn hard to read on a mobile phone, at least the crasherific deviantArt is very readable. You even uploaded a blasted PDF to Google Docs! WHY?!?!?! This makes as much sense as usin the handle of a hammer to drive a nail while holding the metal head with a pair of pliers and using a broken socket wrench to provide the swinging action!!! And the nail is actually a washer!

  26. The J.A.M. says:

    Strange, why didn't Twilight just use a variant of a levitation spell to push the snow out of the way as she walked?Check out my fanfics at the link on my name.

  27. Anonymous says:

    "After stepping into her boots and fur-lined saddle""Fur Lined Saddle"Where exactly do they get the fur?

  28. Good story. I especially liked the fake-out "shipping", and how it got lampshaded.

  29. fieryShaman says:

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  30. Baree says:

    Nice short little story. Nothing else to say.

  31. Anonymous says:

    Really liked Twi's internal monologues as the story progressed. While I'd love to claim to be that witty in my own head, I'm not. Be that as it may, it's what I think Twi would say to herself.

  32. Ambivalent says:

    I love the realism in this story. Twilight is still very intelligent sounding, but doesn't sound like robot in dialogue or thoughts. The humor is wonderful, the lesson and story are very episodic. A+

  33. TenchiFreak5 says:

    It started off real strong, with Twilight's inner monologue acting up as she noted just how much like Twilight she was being causing much lols. And the joke about teleportation spells made me laugh my ass off.Towards the middle is started getting rather meh, like there was more story there and it was excised for some reason. The little shipping joke with Fluttershy brought it back to about as good as it was at the end.It kind of petered out at the end, though.4/5.

  34. Anonymous says:

    This isn't no "Suited For Success",but I could see this as an episode. Simple, short and sweet. I liked it.

  35. Chris says:

    The thing I find most impressive about this story is how much it feels like an actual episode. The humor was great, and the cast were all wonderfully in character. There was one bit that stuck out to me, and I have to say…I 5-starred this story just for the bit with the squirrel. What can I say, I'm a sucker for adorable rodents.

  36. Wow, this story had me smiling from ear to ear the whole time! I could easily see this as an actual episode. Also, I love how you called out shipping fics. That made my day!

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