Story: An Old Mare’s Tale (Update Part 12+13!)


[Normal] I'd like to think this is how Luna reminisces about these particular events. Huzzah for origin stories!

Author:
DeadManSleeping

Description: The long version of the story told in the opening of the pilot episode.

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48 Responses to Story: An Old Mare’s Tale (Update Part 12+13!)

  1. Reid says:

    No! I'm writing this exact same story. (serves me right for putting this off). Oh well. Just like AJ & RD I must compete. Though this time the prize is to win the hearts and minds of our fellow Bronys!

  2. Reid says:

    No! I'm writing this exact same story. (serves me right for putting this off). Oh well. Just like AJ & RD I must compete. Though this time the prize is to win the hearts and minds of our fellow Bronys!

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  5. @ReidHate to tell you, but I'm pretty sure there are at least three or four different versions of this particular story already written, even without this one. It's kind of an obvious gap to fill-in, after all.This story is pretty good, it looks like it's only going to go another part or two. Will be interesting to see how it finishes up.

  6. @ReidHate to tell you, but I'm pretty sure there are at least three or four different versions of this particular story already written, even without this one. It's kind of an obvious gap to fill-in, after all.This story is pretty good, it looks like it's only going to go another part or two. Will be interesting to see how it finishes up.

  7. Steel says:

    DAMN IT! I dislike it when I story I am reading leaves a chapter on a clifhanger! I am really liking this story, bravo.

  8. Steel says:

    DAMN IT! I dislike it when I story I am reading leaves a chapter on a clifhanger! I am really liking this story, bravo.

  9. Anonymous says:

    DAMN YOU CLIFF HANGER POSTOh well new story to monitor. The characterizations are ectremely well done btw ๐Ÿ˜‰

  10. Anonymous says:

    DAMN YOU CLIFF HANGER POSTOh well new story to monitor. The characterizations are ectremely well done btw ๐Ÿ˜‰

  11. Anonymous says:

    Is it bad that I thought The Room and thought, "YOU'RE TEARING ME APART EQUESTIA!"

  12. Anonymous says:

    Is it bad that I thought The Room and thought, "YOU'RE TEARING ME APART EQUESTIA!"

  13. Robin says:

    But . . but . . WHERE'S THE REST D: D: D:Very, very well written. I'd be surprised if this didn't get six stars ๐Ÿ˜€

  14. Robin says:

    But . . but . . WHERE'S THE REST D: D: D:Very, very well written. I'd be surprised if this didn't get six stars ๐Ÿ˜€

  15. I know I'm going to lose the fight, but still, I, Nightmare Moon, approve of this story. Certainly is an interesting spin on my past.

  16. I know I'm going to lose the fight, but still, I, Nightmare Moon, approve of this story. Certainly is an interesting spin on my past.

  17. After thinking about it a while, I have decided that there is one small problem I have with this story. In casting Linda's transformation as a sort of Jekyll and Hyde thing brought about by casting a spell Luna was not prepared for, I feel it undercuts the tragedy of the thing a little bit. After all, the way the show put it was that Luna basically "went postal" after feeling she'd gotten the short end of the stick as far as public opinion went. It seems to take away from it a little by just having be a magical accident.That being said, there is certainly room for alternate interpretations of events, and other stories go this one is pretty well written.

  18. After thinking about it a while, I have decided that there is one small problem I have with this story. In casting Linda's transformation as a sort of Jekyll and Hyde thing brought about by casting a spell Luna was not prepared for, I feel it undercuts the tragedy of the thing a little bit. After all, the way the show put it was that Luna basically "went postal" after feeling she'd gotten the short end of the stick as far as public opinion went. It seems to take away from it a little by just having be a magical accident.That being said, there is certainly room for alternate interpretations of events, and other stories go this one is pretty well written.

  19. (Yes, there are typos. I blame the voice recognition system that I have to use to type due to this broken arm I'm having surgery for on Tuesday. It's not as if Twilight Sparkle's version of "Dragon NaturallySpeaking" is exactly bug-free, either.)

  20. (Yes, there are typos. I blame the voice recognition system that I have to use to type due to this broken arm I'm having surgery for on Tuesday. It's not as if Twilight Sparkle's version of "Dragon NaturallySpeaking" is exactly bug-free, either.)

  21. Anonymous says:

    This is a great story. I'm really liking the whole "Ascension" thing. Can't wait for the next part and/or the conclusion.I do get kinda confused in some long dialogue parts, though. Sometimes it seems unclear who is speaking and who is reacting to the speaking.Still, with as high-quality as the other 99% of this story is it's a small quip.6-stars

  22. Anonymous says:

    This is a great story. I'm really liking the whole "Ascension" thing. Can't wait for the next part and/or the conclusion.I do get kinda confused in some long dialogue parts, though. Sometimes it seems unclear who is speaking and who is reacting to the speaking.Still, with as high-quality as the other 99% of this story is it's a small quip.6-stars

  23. Chanticleer says:

    Well, darn. I'm working on a simmilar story.

  24. Chanticleer says:

    Well, darn. I'm working on a simmilar story.

  25. Kujiiro says:

    While very little focus was actually on Luna for most of the story, it is still fan-freaking-tastic! I was engaged the entire time reading this, never once loosing interest. 5/5 from me.

  26. Kujiiro says:

    While very little focus was actually on Luna for most of the story, it is still fan-freaking-tastic! I was engaged the entire time reading this, never once loosing interest. 5/5 from me.

  27. Anonymous says:

    That feeling you get when the scroll bar gets smaller and smaller when you first open a good fanfic? Feels good, bro!

  28. Anonymous says:

    That feeling you get when the scroll bar gets smaller and smaller when you first open a good fanfic? Feels good, bro!

  29. Baree says:

    Hmm. Darn… You use some of the exact same elements of my fic in progress in your last chapter (8):P If I ever finish it, you'll just have to take my word that I am not copying you :PAnyway, nice chapter. Enjoyed it.

  30. Baree says:

    Hmm. Darn… You use some of the exact same elements of my fic in progress in your last chapter (8):P If I ever finish it, you'll just have to take my word that I am not copying you :PAnyway, nice chapter. Enjoyed it.

  31. Heireau says:

    What Kujiiro said. The lack of Luna's point of view in places doesn't dampen the quality of the story at all though, so it's still awesomes.

  32. Heireau says:

    What Kujiiro said. The lack of Luna's point of view in places doesn't dampen the quality of the story at all though, so it's still awesomes.

  33. Anonymous says:

    This has been mentioned before, but I too think that Luna's transformation seemed too abrupt. The "magical accident" thing didn't seem very well described to me either, and on the whole her transformation just didn't have the impact it should have. Other than that, though, I've been really enjoying the story.

  34. Anonymous says:

    This has been mentioned before, but I too think that Luna's transformation seemed too abrupt. The "magical accident" thing didn't seem very well described to me either, and on the whole her transformation just didn't have the impact it should have. Other than that, though, I've been really enjoying the story.

  35. Anonymous says:

    I really like this story so far, and despite a few and far between grammatical errors, it is well written. I like how time was made to really flesh out the supporting cast and create complex relationships in such a short time, Flash Burn in particular. Do I detect the possibility of a new romance interest, Or is it just wishful thinking? Anyway, I digress. Looking forward to future updates!

  36. Anonymous says:

    I really like this story so far, and despite a few and far between grammatical errors, it is well written. I like how time was made to really flesh out the supporting cast and create complex relationships in such a short time, Flash Burn in particular. Do I detect the possibility of a new romance interest, Or is it just wishful thinking? Anyway, I digress. Looking forward to future updates!

  37. WTBrony says:

    I like this story. Right now I'm too tired to elaborate much on that, just thought you might like to know you have yet another reader.

  38. WTBrony says:

    I like this story. Right now I'm too tired to elaborate much on that, just thought you might like to know you have yet another reader.

  39. Anonymous says:

    Same here the story is pretty good so far. I'm looking forward to more.

  40. Anonymous says:

    Same here the story is pretty good so far. I'm looking forward to more.

  41. MihailK says:

    Oooh, intrigue and politics.My kind of read.

  42. MihailK says:

    Oooh, intrigue and politics.My kind of read.

  43. Daniel says:

    Where is the button to subscribe to these fictions?!

  44. Daniel says:

    Where is the button to subscribe to these fictions?!

  45. Anonymous says:

    Excellent. Love it.

  46. Anonymous says:

    Excellent. Love it.

  47. Anonymous says:

    "The Princess has taken the Prophet to be her eternal bride!"*snort*

  48. Anonymous says:

    This is fantastic. it's great to see a different generation of the elements of harmony that aren't complete clones of the current. 5/5

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