Story: The Midnight Run

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Author: Midnight Shadow

Description: Twilight is approached by Applejack with a strange request – to join her that night for a run, but all is not as it seems. Why is Applejack so nervous? What could this be about?

The Midnight Run

Additional Tags: pagan, nature, mystery, friendship

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125 Responses to Story: The Midnight Run

  1. Pinecone says:

    I shall take my rightful throne.

  2. Pinecone says:

    I shall take my rightful throne.

  3. NinesTempest says:

    AND IT OPENED WITH A LESYAY*reads*

  4. NinesTempest says:

    AND IT OPENED WITH A LESYAY*reads*

  5. Hasido says:

    i really like that picture for some reason.

  6. Hasido says:

    i really like that picture for some reason.

  7. Anonymous says:

    for some reason i love pony shrugs

  8. Anonymous says:

    for some reason i love pony shrugs

  9. NinesTempest says:

    So that was… interesting. I'm not seeing why it happened but it was interesting, so three stars for an average!

  10. NinesTempest says:

    So that was… interesting. I'm not seeing why it happened but it was interesting, so three stars for an average!

  11. tinwhistle says:

    Half a page in and… ME GUSTA

  12. tinwhistle says:

    Half a page in and… ME GUSTA

  13. Anonymous says:

    why do I like this so much?

  14. Anonymous says:

    why do I like this so much?

  15. Anonymous says:

    Huh… Not bad. Well written and interesting at points… but it didn't seem to have much in the way of a purpose…

  16. Anonymous says:

    Huh… Not bad. Well written and interesting at points… but it didn't seem to have much in the way of a purpose…

  17. tinwhistle says:

    Well that was strange.Not bad, though.Seems to be a trend, Twilight burning letters to Celestia instead of sending them. Not safe in a library!

  18. tinwhistle says:

    Well that was strange.Not bad, though.Seems to be a trend, Twilight burning letters to Celestia instead of sending them. Not safe in a library!

  19. Midnight says:

    I'm glad by the mixed reactions, really – this was a strange fic that *isn't* like things I've read before.I'm glad I wrote it, I do hope you like reading it.

  20. Midnight says:

    I'm glad by the mixed reactions, really – this was a strange fic that *isn't* like things I've read before.I'm glad I wrote it, I do hope you like reading it.

  21. Anonymous says:

    This is a lot of sound and fury signifying nothing.Seriously, fuck Applejack.

  22. Anonymous says:

    This is a lot of sound and fury signifying nothing.Seriously, fuck Applejack.

  23. tinwhistle says:

    …reminds me of Equus. At least they galloped, when did you?, etc. etc.

  24. tinwhistle says:

    …reminds me of Equus. At least they galloped, when did you?, etc. etc.

  25. TenchiFreak5 says:

    @AnonymousWhat he said. Its interesting, but hard to explain.

  26. TenchiFreak5 says:

    @AnonymousWhat he said. Its interesting, but hard to explain.

  27. Anonymous says:

    people don´t seem to be getting this one! It´s actually amazing.

  28. Anonymous says:

    people don´t seem to be getting this one! It´s actually amazing.

  29. NinesTempest says:

    @AnonymousI understand it, and it was interesting. But it didn't feel like there was a reason to… read it. I guess.

  30. NinesTempest says:

    @AnonymousI understand it, and it was interesting. But it didn't feel like there was a reason to… read it. I guess.

  31. Anonymous says:

    It was good, an honest effort to show what Earth pony magic might be like. Primal, ancient, reaching back to the start. Not caring that unicorns and Pegasus ponies can directly manipulate the world around them, content with being a part of the interconnected web of life. They likely have quiet, old spells that ensure good harvests and celebrate the changing of the seasons.I can't speak for anyone else, but I think the fact that I've read a lot about primitive magic and religion put me in a good place to "get" the story.

  32. Anonymous says:

    It was good, an honest effort to show what Earth pony magic might be like. Primal, ancient, reaching back to the start. Not caring that unicorns and Pegasus ponies can directly manipulate the world around them, content with being a part of the interconnected web of life. They likely have quiet, old spells that ensure good harvests and celebrate the changing of the seasons.I can't speak for anyone else, but I think the fact that I've read a lot about primitive magic and religion put me in a good place to "get" the story.

  33. Sometimes a story is just something an author needs to write, no other reason. I really like it, since it examines an instinct that humans don't really have. Very nice.

  34. Sometimes a story is just something an author needs to write, no other reason. I really like it, since it examines an instinct that humans don't really have. Very nice.

  35. Anonymous says:

    I don't like it when a story doesn't go anywhere.This story goes nowhere.But it IS interesting, and I do like the writing.Huh.

  36. Anonymous says:

    I don't like it when a story doesn't go anywhere.This story goes nowhere.But it IS interesting, and I do like the writing.Huh.

  37. Anonymous says:

    Somehow I'm not surprised at most not seeming to know what to make of this one, but might need a little point of reference there and a lot of those who'd read this might not have that. Loving Twilight's introduction to really old ways. besides that, reeks of that dream the conversion bureau fics have in a few, and for good reason. interesting way to see Twilight's reaction of it too, instead of just having her mull over it.

  38. Anonymous says:

    Somehow I'm not surprised at most not seeming to know what to make of this one, but might need a little point of reference there and a lot of those who'd read this might not have that. Loving Twilight's introduction to really old ways. besides that, reeks of that dream the conversion bureau fics have in a few, and for good reason. interesting way to see Twilight's reaction of it too, instead of just having her mull over it.

  39. Anonymous says:

    SPOILERS!! SPOILERS !!! SPOILERS!!!This story isn't about "going anywhere". With stories like these you have to feel them. They exist on a purely emotional level, just as Twilight's experience was on a primal and spiritual one. Just like Twilight did, you have to let your mind blend into it and follow its flow where it runs to.I was wondering when someone was going to get around to writing something about the ponies acting as real horses. I really enjoy the references to the ponies BEING a force of nature, not just attempting to control a force of nature. And now, I shudder to think what would have happened to Twilight if she had not tuned in to the herd when she did. *glances over at the glue factory*To all those who say that this story is "strange" or "uneventful", I can only say that you have to let go of civility to understand this one. Go back to tribal instinct. Midnight has yet to disappoint me with his stories. EXCEPT that the "vernal equinox" is in spring time (in March usually). I think he was meaning to say the "autumnal equinox" which begins to end the summer. I did notice a couple little typos (ears and ears) but nothing major.All in all good stuff.

  40. Anonymous says:

    SPOILERS!! SPOILERS !!! SPOILERS!!!This story isn't about "going anywhere". With stories like these you have to feel them. They exist on a purely emotional level, just as Twilight's experience was on a primal and spiritual one. Just like Twilight did, you have to let your mind blend into it and follow its flow where it runs to.I was wondering when someone was going to get around to writing something about the ponies acting as real horses. I really enjoy the references to the ponies BEING a force of nature, not just attempting to control a force of nature. And now, I shudder to think what would have happened to Twilight if she had not tuned in to the herd when she did. *glances over at the glue factory*To all those who say that this story is "strange" or "uneventful", I can only say that you have to let go of civility to understand this one. Go back to tribal instinct. Midnight has yet to disappoint me with his stories. EXCEPT that the "vernal equinox" is in spring time (in March usually). I think he was meaning to say the "autumnal equinox" which begins to end the summer. I did notice a couple little typos (ears and ears) but nothing major.All in all good stuff.

  41. Bunnylisk says:

    wait.. "that time of the year" ???They only have to put up with it once a year?!? Now I really want to be a pony >.<

  42. Bunnylisk says:

    wait.. "that time of the year" ???They only have to put up with it once a year?!? Now I really want to be a pony >.<

  43. Secret says:

    Ummm……That was…interesting. I'm not really sure what to say about it….Well I can say I liked it. I think I might have to read this again when I'm not at work and try to understand it just a bit better but I really do like it.

  44. Secret says:

    Ummm……That was…interesting. I'm not really sure what to say about it….Well I can say I liked it. I think I might have to read this again when I'm not at work and try to understand it just a bit better but I really do like it.

  45. NinesTempest says:

    @BunnyliskI don't think it's refering to that…

  46. NinesTempest says:

    @BunnyliskI don't think it's refering to that…

  47. Anonymous says:

    i love it 8'Di was hoping to see at least e litle shipping (i know the shipping tag is not there XD)i cant help it, i love shippings -w-but seriusly, i loved this one :3

  48. Anonymous says:

    i love it 8'Di was hoping to see at least e litle shipping (i know the shipping tag is not there XD)i cant help it, i love shippings -w-but seriusly, i loved this one :3

  49. rangergx9 says:

    That was a very enlightening story. I found it very enjoyable. 🙂

  50. Anonymous says:

    @NinesTempestIt's referring to exactly that, and not only do they only go through it once a year, they re-absorb the lining instead of it tearing off and being discarded like with humans.It was interesting, but I feel it suffers from a lack of build up, some rite or ritual to "put them in the mood" so to speak.

  51. Anonymous says:

    @NinesTempestIt's referring to exactly that, and not only do they only go through it once a year, they re-absorb the lining instead of it tearing off and being discarded like with humans.It was interesting, but I feel it suffers from a lack of build up, some rite or ritual to "put them in the mood" so to speak.

  52. Allicorn says:

    Beautiful! Well done Midnight, you clearly "get" horses 🙂

  53. Allicorn says:

    Beautiful! Well done Midnight, you clearly "get" horses 🙂

  54. I loved this! Not something I would expect, but I loved it nonetheless! :3

  55. I loved this! Not something I would expect, but I loved it nonetheless! :3

  56. nemryn says:

    It's… kinda weird, seeing these ponies act like actual horses.

  57. nemryn says:

    It's… kinda weird, seeing these ponies act like actual horses.

  58. Abalidoth says:

    I'm still not sure why the unicorns were allowed in. They're far more tied to their magic than Pegasi are–they use it to manipulate everything. It just seems odd to me that they'd still be able to resonate with the earth like that, even though they generally prefer more abstract magics.

  59. Abalidoth says:

    I'm still not sure why the unicorns were allowed in. They're far more tied to their magic than Pegasi are–they use it to manipulate everything. It just seems odd to me that they'd still be able to resonate with the earth like that, even though they generally prefer more abstract magics.

  60. NinesTempest says:

    @AnonymousThat just seems so easy.

  61. NinesTempest says:

    @AnonymousThat just seems so easy.

  62. Wraith says:

    @AbalidothEh, I can see it, though. Even if they do use magic for a lot of things, the unicorn ponies still have to rely on their hooves to get around.Other than Fluttershy, who's acknowledged as strange for a pegasus, most of them don't seem to come to ground at -all- for long periods of time, preferring to stay in the clouds, out of reach of the changes of the seasons and the everyday magic of the world.

  63. Wraith says:

    @AbalidothEh, I can see it, though. Even if they do use magic for a lot of things, the unicorn ponies still have to rely on their hooves to get around.Other than Fluttershy, who's acknowledged as strange for a pegasus, most of them don't seem to come to ground at -all- for long periods of time, preferring to stay in the clouds, out of reach of the changes of the seasons and the everyday magic of the world.

  64. Anonymous says:

    Also, it seems that pegasi, being air-based, are the least likely to be able to tap into the ancient energy that earth ponies embrace. In the classic "four elements" view, air and earth are opposites, like fire and water.

  65. Midnight says:

    @AnonymousI'll fix it and pretend I never got it wrong! damnit!I did indeed mean autumnal.

  66. *pokerface*In the words of Twilight herself; "I don't get it."Maybe I'm not philosophical enough (which I find hard to believe since I contemplate existence on a semi-regular basis) I'm just not really… getting this.Frankly, Twilight was right. It sounded more like a cult.

  67. Bunnylisk says:

    it was really interesting but somehow I don't believe Twilight would just let herself be assaulted like that. Aside from Celestia herself, Twilight is probably the last pony you'd ever want to piss off. I would have found it much more believable if she had thought these people placed some kind of evil spell on AJ and lashed out at them with her magic.

  68. Midnight says:

    @lainofthewiredYes! This was why I wrote it.We hear in the show a lot about unicorns and how powerful they are, and how fast and amazing pegasus ponies are…but earth ponies tend to get the short end of stick.From Word of Faust we have it that earth ponies have this deeper connection to the land, so I…explored that.I agonized over sending this in for about a week, since it didn't feel and stll doesn't feel quite what I intended but it's as good as I could get it and ponies who give me honest opinions on my fics said "this is good".I know it's not for everypony, partly at least because in it our beloved talking ponies are being…ponies.I originally had some saucy content that fitted in my original mental image but just looked ridiculous on paper. Maybe I should come back to that one day…I was actually asked for a sequel.

  69. Midnight says:

    @Anonymousah, the conversion bureau fic "I'm becoming a pony" dream.guilty.I do believe that the "dream sequence" may have directly inspired me to write this. Or maybe the other way around.

  70. "Pagan Baby, won't you walk with me?Pagan Baby, Come on home with me.Pagan baby, Take me for a ride.Roll me, baby, Roll your big, brown eyes."–Creedence Clearwater RevivalI really liked the story. It's quite unusual for the milieu of the show, but it makes for an interesting variation on the same theme of tying earth pony magic to the earth as Laurence Brown explored in "Moonbeam". Earth ponies (and unicorns) acting like primitive horses is a really interesting analogy to human pagan rituals.One leetle point, though—according to Lauren Faust, Celestia and Luna are supposed to embody the characteristics of all three sub-species: unicorn, pegasus, AND earth pony. Which means that they would have access to earth pony magic and rituals, too. (As Luna does in "Moonbeam".) As such, and especially given their advanced age, I would honestly expect them already to know all about (and perhaps show up themselves occasionally) on the midnight runs.

  71. Midnight says:

    @Chris Meadowsooh, that's a wonderful idea. What if they go incognito?

  72. Anonymous says:

    I have a love/hate relationship with ritual conceptions like this. On the one hand, I understand that when participating in things like this, you won't get a sense of the power and magic if you hold back are are reluctant to take part in the customs.On the other hand, I've seen rituals like this seriously and traumatically breach people's boundaries when they weren't ready. The way Applejack treated Twilight about her bag can be really triggering in real life for some, and despite the fact that I get why she acted that way, I don't find her behavior defensible.So, all in all, I really enjoyed this fic, while at the same time it made me pretty uncomfortable. It was very well written, though.

  73. @AnonymousIn a way, the fact that the story made you uncomfortable is probably one of the more meaningful praises you could give it. As a writer myself, I know that writers want to do more than just elicit a "huh, nice" reaction. They want to affect people. That a story is powerful enough to disturb you means the author has reached that goal.

  74. @MidnightThey're distinctive enough in appearance (not to mention the wings) that I'd think they would sort of have to.

  75. Anonymous says:

    I.. I genuinely adored this.I wonder though, are Pegasi allowed to participate?

  76. I want to say that your writing style is very effective and does get the feeling and point across, but I can't help but feel that the premise seems to undermine the authority and power of friendship. It takes potshots at a given truth and makes it seem weak, cheap, and impure. Doing so makes everything crumble into pieces and awkward to read. In essence, It contridicts itself.

  77. I want to say that your writing style is very effective and does get the feeling and point across, but I can't help but feel that the premise seems to undermine the authority and power of friendship. It takes potshots at a given truth and makes it seem weak, cheap, and impure. Doing so makes everything crumble into pieces and awkward to read. In essence, It contridicts itself.

  78. Bryan says:

    I liked this one very much, though I also defintitely agree with Anonymous a couple of posts earlier where the complaint was raised about the trauma Twilight could have suffered. It seemed like learning the rules by directly experiencing them was an intended part of the process, but still, given how strong a reaction her bookbag set off I think Applejack should have warned her more strongly about that sort of thing ahead of time. If I were Twilight I'd be a bit upset about that.I'm left uncertain about whether to incorporate the Midnight Run into my own personal fanon. It was very powerful, but that's a double-edged sword. I don't want these ponies getting _too_ deep. 🙂

  79. Bryan says:

    I liked this one very much, though I also defintitely agree with Anonymous a couple of posts earlier where the complaint was raised about the trauma Twilight could have suffered. It seemed like learning the rules by directly experiencing them was an intended part of the process, but still, given how strong a reaction her bookbag set off I think Applejack should have warned her more strongly about that sort of thing ahead of time. If I were Twilight I'd be a bit upset about that.I'm left uncertain about whether to incorporate the Midnight Run into my own personal fanon. It was very powerful, but that's a double-edged sword. I don't want these ponies getting _too_ deep. 🙂

  80. zeb516 says:

    I dont get it what purpose does the midnight run do for the earth or even for the herd?The same with the buffalos in over a barrel why do they stampede for no reason what purpose does it have for them or even their village does it serve a purpose or does it serve nothing but the sheer amount of fun they have?I made a wall of text :i

  81. zeb516 says:

    I dont get it what purpose does the midnight run do for the earth or even for the herd?The same with the buffalos in over a barrel why do they stampede for no reason what purpose does it have for them or even their village does it serve a purpose or does it serve nothing but the sheer amount of fun they have?I made a wall of text :i

  82. Midnight says:

    @AnonymousAs I said to one of the pre-readers, I took a little bit of a liberty and worked off of "fall weather friends".Twilight ran in that race – and she just ran. She didn't feel any need to make herself lighter, didn't need to teleport, or anything like that (also, she's an honest pony, so no cheatin') but Dash on the other hand – when she and AJ were competing, her very winged nature led AJ to tie them down for the running of the leaves.Pegasi, to me, *can't* not use their wings (with Fluttershy being the only real exception to that).It's not that they couldn't take part, but that their very nature would be anti-thetical to the idea. Maybe in a sequel I could explore Fluttershy or some other pegasus taking part…I really intended this to be a one-shot but you never know.

  83. Midnight says:

    @AnonymousAs I said to one of the pre-readers, I took a little bit of a liberty and worked off of "fall weather friends".Twilight ran in that race – and she just ran. She didn't feel any need to make herself lighter, didn't need to teleport, or anything like that (also, she's an honest pony, so no cheatin') but Dash on the other hand – when she and AJ were competing, her very winged nature led AJ to tie them down for the running of the leaves.Pegasi, to me, *can't* not use their wings (with Fluttershy being the only real exception to that).It's not that they couldn't take part, but that their very nature would be anti-thetical to the idea. Maybe in a sequel I could explore Fluttershy or some other pegasus taking part…I really intended this to be a one-shot but you never know.

  84. Midnight says:

    @WierdplatformerTaking potshots how?To me, it's a given that earth ponies do more than just walk on four legs. I don't see the contradiction.In our world, such things are supernatural.In Equestria, this is the way things are.

  85. Midnight says:

    @WierdplatformerTaking potshots how?To me, it's a given that earth ponies do more than just walk on four legs. I don't see the contradiction.In our world, such things are supernatural.In Equestria, this is the way things are.

  86. Midnight says:

    @BryanI'm glad it makes you thoughtful – it means a lot to me.I know the bag scene was traumatic, but that's what I intended. If you've never been charged at by a previously friendly and docile pony then you don't know their real, true natureI'm not trying to demonize anything, but I wanted to explore something that, to my knowledge, hasn't really been touched.By the sound of these comments, I got that at least partly right.

  87. Midnight says:

    @BryanI'm glad it makes you thoughtful – it means a lot to me.I know the bag scene was traumatic, but that's what I intended. If you've never been charged at by a previously friendly and docile pony then you don't know their real, true natureI'm not trying to demonize anything, but I wanted to explore something that, to my knowledge, hasn't really been touched.By the sound of these comments, I got that at least partly right.

  88. Midnight says:

    @zeb516The running of the leaves is physically what makes the leaves fall to the ground. Without that, fall would never happen and winter would never occur.Celestia and Luna raise the sun and moon, pegasi control the weather.So what do the earth ponies do?…they guide the earth through the year, through the seasons, with their innate inborn primal magic. Without the Midnight Run (I'm saying) the seasons would never change. The earth/Equestria doesn't move by itself, the earth ponies move the planet.Celestia and Luna control the stars, moon and sun, the pegasi control the air, but the earth ponies move the entire planet.

  89. Midnight says:

    @zeb516The running of the leaves is physically what makes the leaves fall to the ground. Without that, fall would never happen and winter would never occur.Celestia and Luna raise the sun and moon, pegasi control the weather.So what do the earth ponies do?…they guide the earth through the year, through the seasons, with their innate inborn primal magic. Without the Midnight Run (I'm saying) the seasons would never change. The earth/Equestria doesn't move by itself, the earth ponies move the planet.Celestia and Luna control the stars, moon and sun, the pegasi control the air, but the earth ponies move the entire planet.

  90. Midnight says:

    @BryanTwilight WAS warned – I never showed her reading the letter, but it was stated right near the beginning that she should come naked, unadorned by civilization. Twilight broke that rule.And yeah, Twilight was very upset. Her normally friendly civilized buddy AJ turned into a frantic wild animal…it's what I intended.

  91. Midnight says:

    @BryanTwilight WAS warned – I never showed her reading the letter, but it was stated right near the beginning that she should come naked, unadorned by civilization. Twilight broke that rule.And yeah, Twilight was very upset. Her normally friendly civilized buddy AJ turned into a frantic wild animal…it's what I intended.

  92. VulpesImbris says:

    :3 I really loved reading this fic, I didn't think there was really any way of pulling off a pagan theme given the subject matter of ponies, but… well, I was dead wrong!~Well done, I'll definitely be reading more from you soon!

  93. VulpesImbris says:

    :3 I really loved reading this fic, I didn't think there was really any way of pulling off a pagan theme given the subject matter of ponies, but… well, I was dead wrong!~Well done, I'll definitely be reading more from you soon!

  94. This was….. beautiful.

  95. This was….. beautiful.

  96. HeatWave says:

    A thoughtful piece. If you buy into the idea that Equestria is a post-apocalyptic earth, then it makes a connection to the pre-sentient horses of yesteryear, showing that not all knowledge of the past has been lost to the folds of time.A short fic, well written, and it's obvious the author had an idea that he wanted on paper. He explores the depths of pony lore and ability, what makes the Earth Pony special? Surely they have something beyond being a wingless, hornless breed. Word of God states this is so, but the show never tells us what that is.And fanfiction being what it is, we will explore that for ourselves, and so Midnight does, and I think he does a pretty good job of it.They are, after all, still ponies. And we know that despite their speech, they still make pony noises (such as the guards that flew Twilight to Ponyville and Pinkie Pie after tasting Rainbows) so whose to say that deep down they don't still feel those primal urges through which they can connect to the earth.I liked it!

  97. HeatWave says:

    A thoughtful piece. If you buy into the idea that Equestria is a post-apocalyptic earth, then it makes a connection to the pre-sentient horses of yesteryear, showing that not all knowledge of the past has been lost to the folds of time.A short fic, well written, and it's obvious the author had an idea that he wanted on paper. He explores the depths of pony lore and ability, what makes the Earth Pony special? Surely they have something beyond being a wingless, hornless breed. Word of God states this is so, but the show never tells us what that is.And fanfiction being what it is, we will explore that for ourselves, and so Midnight does, and I think he does a pretty good job of it.They are, after all, still ponies. And we know that despite their speech, they still make pony noises (such as the guards that flew Twilight to Ponyville and Pinkie Pie after tasting Rainbows) so whose to say that deep down they don't still feel those primal urges through which they can connect to the earth.I liked it!

  98. I read it through and didn't really get it, so I spent all day thinking about it and reread it again. Now I love it, beautiful stuff!

  99. I read it through and didn't really get it, so I spent all day thinking about it and reread it again. Now I love it, beautiful stuff!

  100. Anonymous says:

    Halfway through the story I would've given this a 2 or 3, but by the end, I understood, so I'm giving this a 5.

  101. Anonymous says:

    Halfway through the story I would've given this a 2 or 3, but by the end, I understood, so I'm giving this a 5.

  102. Nova25 says:

    Sooooooooo…AJ is in some sort of ''club/group'' that like to act like Prehistoric-pony (super-extra-natural-hippy-ponies ?) during their 'Friday-nights' ?…that's surely one heck of a definition for ''weird'' right there ?..?But, seriously… those are real weird ponies.After all, you don't see any sane human going around naked, pretending to be cavemen or monkeys ?Odd story, I must say…(It should have the *Random* Tag… prehistoric/hippy-like ponies…)

  103. Nova25 says:

    Sooooooooo…AJ is in some sort of ''club/group'' that like to act like Prehistoric-pony (super-extra-natural-hippy-ponies ?) during their 'Friday-nights' ?…that's surely one heck of a definition for ''weird'' right there ?..?But, seriously… those are real weird ponies.After all, you don't see any sane human going around naked, pretending to be cavemen or monkeys ?Odd story, I must say…(It should have the *Random* Tag… prehistoric/hippy-like ponies…)

  104. Anonymous says:

    I rated 5/5. Very well written, strong imagery. Brought to mind mental pictures of ancient times. Rreally cool explanation as to how earth pony magik works.

  105. Anonymous says:

    I rated 5/5. Very well written, strong imagery. Brought to mind mental pictures of ancient times. Rreally cool explanation as to how earth pony magik works.

  106. ZarPaulus says:

    I truly wonder why some people romanticize living like cavemen.So what was with Applejack's question at the beginning, she concerned that one of the stallions might try to mount Twilight?

  107. ZarPaulus says:

    I truly wonder why some people romanticize living like cavemen.So what was with Applejack's question at the beginning, she concerned that one of the stallions might try to mount Twilight?

  108. Anonymous says:

    I loved the story, full on.However, I can tell a LOT of people in previous comments are looking into it way too much, or wanting it to be something it isn't.It doesn't have an exact purpose, no.Its basically a oneshot. A really, really good oneshot, as opposed to full story.Anyway: back to the point, loved the story!

  109. Anonymous says:

    I loved the story, full on.However, I can tell a LOT of people in previous comments are looking into it way too much, or wanting it to be something it isn't.It doesn't have an exact purpose, no.Its basically a oneshot. A really, really good oneshot, as opposed to full story.Anyway: back to the point, loved the story!

  110. Anonymous says:

    @ZarPaulus I read an earlier version of it with something of the sort in a background event, along with twilight's obsaervation how nopony seemed to give it a second glance.

  111. Anonymous says:

    @ZarPaulus I read an earlier version of it with something of the sort in a background event, along with twilight's obsaervation how nopony seemed to give it a second glance.

  112. Anonymous says:

    magical spells really work!! I never thought there were still honest, genuine, trustworthy and very powerful spell casters until i met the spiritual helper, ayeomoni ajolaye. last week he did a love spell for me and it worked effectively and now he just casted another healing spell for my friend who has fibroid and now she is totally free and she is presently the happiest person on earth, she keeps thanking me all day..I just thought it would be good to tell the whole world about his good work and how genuine he is, i wasn't thinking i could get any help because of my past experiences with other fake casters who could not bring my husband back to me and they all promised heaven and earth and all they are able to do is ask for more money all the time until i met with this man. he does all spells, Love spells, money spells, lottery spells e.t.c i wish i can save every one who is in those casters trap right now because i went though hell thinking and hoping they could help me.his email address is: nativedoctor101@live.comif you need or want to ask me anything my e-mail is: melinda9090@aol.comKind Regards,Melinda

  113. Anonymous says:

    magical spells really work!! I never thought there were still honest, genuine, trustworthy and very powerful spell casters until i met the spiritual helper, ayeomoni ajolaye. last week he did a love spell for me and it worked effectively and now he just casted another healing spell for my friend who has fibroid and now she is totally free and she is presently the happiest person on earth, she keeps thanking me all day..I just thought it would be good to tell the whole world about his good work and how genuine he is, i wasn't thinking i could get any help because of my past experiences with other fake casters who could not bring my husband back to me and they all promised heaven and earth and all they are able to do is ask for more money all the time until i met with this man. he does all spells, Love spells, money spells, lottery spells e.t.c i wish i can save every one who is in those casters trap right now because i went though hell thinking and hoping they could help me.his email address is: nativedoctor101@live.comif you need or want to ask me anything my e-mail is: melinda9090@aol.comKind Regards,Melinda

  114. Midnight says:

    @ZarPaulusI don't know, I certainly wouldn't. For the purposes of this story though, it works. Getting in touch with your "true nature" is something all sentient, sapient life-forms should attempt though, it's very zen.Equestria needs earth ponies as much if not more than pegasi and unicorns – I just like the idea of it happening ostensibly behind the scenes.

  115. Midnight says:

    @ZarPaulusI don't know, I certainly wouldn't. For the purposes of this story though, it works. Getting in touch with your "true nature" is something all sentient, sapient life-forms should attempt though, it's very zen.Equestria needs earth ponies as much if not more than pegasi and unicorns – I just like the idea of it happening ostensibly behind the scenes.

  116. Midnight says:

    @Nova25If you've never heard of naturists…well…Umm, they're not hippy-ponies. They are as necessary for the well-being of equestria as pegasi are. they way they contribute is by communing with the earth – and it's not for show.Remember where they live – it's not Earth.

  117. Midnight says:

    @Nova25If you've never heard of naturists…well…Umm, they're not hippy-ponies. They are as necessary for the well-being of equestria as pegasi are. they way they contribute is by communing with the earth – and it's not for show.Remember where they live – it's not Earth.

  118. Twilight! Such a dirty mind!I love the contemplation over earth pony magic (and despite it not being the first time I've read such a thing, it comes across really well!), but this story is FUCKING. CREEPY. Maybe it's just me. I find the concept of them all acting like animals as disturbing as it is exhilarating, and I applaud you for that. It takes a certain skill to really characterize an animal mind in that manner.What she did with the letter was awesome, though.

  119. …I'm commenting again. I hope you see this.This fic is going to stick in my mind and BOTHER me for days. In a good way.That excitement at the beginning, viewing it as some sort of cult, that frightens me. I've always hated initiation rituals. The willing setting-aside of the humanizing aspect frightens me. Twilight's acceptance of her place in the herd, against her duty to Celestia, that probably frightens me too.This is probably more about me than about the fic. (Although I saw in your comments what the Run is meant to accomplish; that is freaky brilliant!) In Twilight's place, I couldn't do something like this. I would have turned tail and never looked at my friends the same way again. This is really just an amazing piece; why doesn't it have more stars? WHY ARE YOU GUYS MORE FREAKED OUT?

  120. Jetfire says:

    I think I am too evolved for this story. Yet it is powerful. Well done.

  121. Anonymous says:

    This is a really good story, not least because humans deep down have these same sorts of "primal urges" and herd mentality. (Humans are animals too, after all.) It's disturbing to us because it provides a glimpse into the frightening underbelly of human nature.

  122. Here it is, three days later, I am still thinking about this story. I'm not sure if that says more about me or the story. Probably me. This is one of a very small number of fics that I've thought about after reading them; certainly for this long. I'm feeling slightly unhinged.

  123. Roxor says:

    What on Earth did I just read? Whatever logic there was behind it, I couldn't follow it. You might as well have been describing random ten-second video clips for all I got out of this story.

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