Story: Creeping Darkness (Update Complete!!)

[Crossover][GrimLight] An Alan Wake crossover?! This has potential, especially with ponies heading the story!


Author: Pen Stroke

Description: A MLP FiM crossover with the XBOX 360 game Alan Wake

There is a shadow to all of existence, a place that all worlds are shielded from by a thin veil. A Dark Place, where a single presence plots and struggles to consume all creation with its darkness. The author Alan Wake is one who has defeated this Dark Presence, but to save his wife and his world Alan had to remain trapped in the darkness.

Now, through his struggles to return to his wife, Alan has unintentionally released the Darkness and an old villain upon Equestria. To fix the mistake, Alan starts a new story with Twilight Sparkle as the protagonist. Can the unicorn find the strength to face the darkness, or is all of Equestria doomed to be the victim in the dreadful horror story?

Note: Story assumes no preceding knowledge of the game Alan Wake. Written for any MLP:FiM fan to enjoy.

Creeping Darkness Prelude
Creeping Darkness Chapter 1
Creeping Darkness Chapter 2
Creeping Darkness Chapter 3
Creeping Darkness Chapter 4
Creeping Darkness Chapter 5
Creeping Darkness Chapter 6
Creeping Darkness Chapter 7
Creeping Darkness Chapter 8
Creeping Darkness Chapter 9
Creeping Darkness Chapter 10 
Creeping Darkness Chapter 11 (New!)
Creeping Darkness Chapter 12 (New!)
Creeping Darkness Chapter 13 (New!)
Creeping Darkness Chapter 14 (New!)
Creeping Darkness Epilogue (New!)

Additional Tags: Ponies try to stand against The Dark Presence, Alan Wake, Horror

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177 Responses to Story: Creeping Darkness (Update Complete!!)

  1. NinesTempest says:

    Oh my god.Alan Wake is one of the best games I've played on a console. It makes me wish I had a 360, despite not wanting any other game on it (pc faggot master race). Fffuuuuuuuu

  2. I hope Twilight brought enough D-cells and AA's*rim shot*

  3. Jake Smith says:

    I kid you not, I was just thinking about this game.

  4. Chance says:

    Must read this sometime. Alan Wake was amazing.

  5. Anonymous says:

    Grimlight? What does that mean?

  6. @AnonymousThe story is Grimlight because the situation itself is dark in nature but there no explicit depiction of blood or gore.

  7. NinesTempest says:

    @Lawrence GanderPretty sure she can make light whenever she wantsI just hope she doesn't have to switch her horn batteries :I

  8. GameBuddy says:

    I lurve ponies. I lurve Alan Wake.Why not?~Buddy Vox

  9. With Alan Wake's unique narrative and experience, this has the potential for greatness. I'm surprised it's not being labeled as Grimdark.

  10. NinesTempest says:

    Just about half way through chapter four.Dialog is somewhat difficult to read, since it isn't always going back and forth between two characters. What skills you have for your prose and setting and exposition is… slightly at a loss with your dialog. Movements, inflection, something besides just the quotes. It helps visualize the scene a LOT more.

  11. NinesTempest says:

    @TGPFluttershyCoincidentally, this is explained in the story, which is actually leaving me VERY intrigued.

  12. Anonymous says:

    Just read the prologue, and you're really good at writing in Alan's voice. It's almost as if I can hear his voice actor through my headphones. O.o

  13. Anonymous says:

    @Pen Stroke PonySooo… No explicit death then? A lot of us don't like death in our pony…

  14. NinesTempest says:

    Fucking damnit that ending.Need more. Need so much more. Your action flows perfectly, everyone is in character and I keep imagining the exact same town as the game (not sure if intended). My god this is so good, please please continue; you obviously will but my god it's done well.

  15. Shmoogy says:

    i enjoyed alan wake so i cant wait to read this

  16. Anonymous says:

    im surpirsed i havent seen a silent hill my little pony crossover yet >.>

  17. You, sir (madam?), have just combined two of my most favorite things; Eff yeah, I'm reading this tonight!

  18. Andrew says:

    This is such a great story. I find myself hoping that the ponies will end up helping Alan Wake to get out of the dark place.

  19. Andrew says:

    Looking forward to the next chapter by the way.

  20. Anonymous says:

    I don't think I've read a fanfiction as compelling as this one. I honestly can't wait for its continuation!

  21. Anonymous says:

    The not so subtle references to FiM were distrubing to me… For example, "She chose to remember Pinkie Pie's song, Giggle at the Ghosties". When was the song even named in-universe?

  22. Anonymous says:

    For some (albeit awesome) reason, this song (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sq5YSqzX6Jk) fits in the first chapter. And +500 points to anyone who's actually read any of the books this song comes from, or the anime.

  23. Anonymous says:

    This is awesome.

  24. Anonymous says:

    Okay, that was one evil cliffhanger you left on Chapter 4….better be an update….Best horror fanfic I've ever seen. Can't wait to see more!

  25. This is brilliant.I'm a paranoid pony when it comes to the dark or anything paranormal so this is the exact thing I love.Something new to fear.I hope a new chapter comes soon.

  26. Meliadhor says:

    I've just finished reading chapter5 and, wow. I gotta say, your action-horror story is really good. It has the 'flow' and while not being scary per se, it did keep my attention and made me want more of it. Keep up writing the good stuff!And oddly enough I can't shake off the mental images from Rescue From Midnight Castle. So, evil shadow-Applejack anypony~?

  27. Anonymous says:

    I'm just sad at the fact I didn't get to enjoy some pony poker. :(But the story is going quite well. Looking forward to the next chapter.

  28. Anonymous says:

    Alan Wake was by far my favorite game. Yeeeess….

  29. Anonymous says:

    PHWAAAAAAAAHOH GOD THAT CLIFFHANGER

  30. Anonymous says:

    …I currently hate the author for leaving it with that cliffhanger.

  31. Andrew says:

    I find myself hoping that at one point Pinkie Pie goes crazy and tries to kill them in order to keep them from falling prey to the darkness. Possibly when Pinkie and Twilight are all alone. THAT would be horror story material.

  32. Andrew says:

    Well fuck Pinkie Pie's gone so that idea doesn't work.

  33. That cliffhanger!Argh!

  34. IrekCaeden says:

    This story made me start playing Alan Wake again, and it is glorious.Seriously, this story is ranking as probably my favorite out of the, admittedly few, fanfictions I've read.You've not only captured the characters of the mane 6, but you've also nailed down Wake's writing style, and I can almost imagine the entire thing being narrated by his voice actor. I only have a couple issues outside general spelling and grammer, one of which being the songs. As much as I love those songs, suddenly having a URL in the story kinda broke the flow for me, and I felt that just writing the lyrics in the story and leaving the links for after would've helped a bit. Just something to keep in mind for the future I suppose, hehe. But other than that, this story is engaging, stays true to the characters from both works, and kept me on the edge of my seat the entire time.And yes, I think you're a bastard for chapter 6's cliffhanger. >:C

  35. Steben says:

    You got an evil way of writing cliffhangers, you know that? (Heh, previous review called you a bastard…I was gonna too and I didn't even read that until now)That aside, I can't put into words how amazed I am on how well you have put this fic together. There's a lot of bad crossover fics out there, and originally I passed right over this story because of it. For that, I'm sorry for being cynical.I never played Alan Wake…but now I'm thinking about renting the game.I hope we get to see more of this.

  36. Steben says:

    You got an evil way of writing cliffhangers, you know that? (Heh, previous review called you a bastard…I was gonna too and I didn't even read that until now)That aside, I can't put into words how amazed I am on how well you have put this fic together. There's a lot of bad crossover fics out there, and originally I passed right over this story because of it. For that, I'm sorry for being cynical.I never played Alan Wake…but now I'm thinking about renting the game.I hope we get to see more of this.

  37. NinesTempest says:

    This is… so awesome. Pinkie Pie and Rarity now… You're going to take everyone now aren't you? ALL OF THEM!? Gonna fuckin'… leave Twilight all alone, or at least with Fluttershy… especially considering the game, you'll probably leave ONE.Steben, obviously this entire fic is MAJOR spoilers, to some degree, but you'll still be able to enjoy it. It isn't scary, it's just remarkably atmospheric with a fantastic story.

  38. NinesTempest says:

    This is… so awesome. Pinkie Pie and Rarity now… You're going to take everyone now aren't you? ALL OF THEM!? Gonna fuckin'… leave Twilight all alone, or at least with Fluttershy… especially considering the game, you'll probably leave ONE.Steben, obviously this entire fic is MAJOR spoilers, to some degree, but you'll still be able to enjoy it. It isn't scary, it's just remarkably atmospheric with a fantastic story.

  39. zeb516 says:

    I just have one question for you,WHY U MAKE CLIFF HANGAR LIKE THAT

  40. zeb516 says:

    I just have one question for you,WHY U MAKE CLIFF HANGAR LIKE THAT

  41. zeb516 says:

    MAKE MORE PLEASE!

  42. zeb516 says:

    MAKE MORE PLEASE!

  43. Banana says:

    I have never played Alan Wake so this style of narration is unique and engaging. I also neglected to read the prologue so I can piece the everything together later as I immerse myself. I like what you've created here. The idea that Celestia and Luna were so readily defeated took some time to settle, but I am very interested on how the mane cast is going to pull this off and escape this whole shadowy affair. Great work and I hope you update soon because I sure do love me a good pony-horror fic.

  44. Banana says:

    I have never played Alan Wake so this style of narration is unique and engaging. I also neglected to read the prologue so I can piece the everything together later as I immerse myself. I like what you've created here. The idea that Celestia and Luna were so readily defeated took some time to settle, but I am very interested on how the mane cast is going to pull this off and escape this whole shadowy affair. Great work and I hope you update soon because I sure do love me a good pony-horror fic.

  45. Andrew says:

    OH HELL YES FOUR UPDATES OH MAN THIS IS GOING TO BE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD.

  46. Andrew says:

    OH HELL YES FOUR UPDATES OH MAN THIS IS GOING TO BE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD.

  47. York says:

    Dat cliffhanger!This is beyond exciting. As a huge fan of Alan Wake, I gotta say that the story has been incredible so far. Can't wait to see what happens next… Let's hope for the best.

  48. York says:

    Dat cliffhanger!This is beyond exciting. As a huge fan of Alan Wake, I gotta say that the story has been incredible so far. Can't wait to see what happens next… Let's hope for the best.

  49. Anonymous says:

    This cliffhanger is WORSE than the one before!GAH!Confound this author!

  50. Anonymous says:

    This cliffhanger is WORSE than the one before!GAH!Confound this author!

  51. Andrew says:

    OH MY GOSH I WANT THE NEXT PART SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad

  52. Andrew says:

    OH MY GOSH I WANT THE NEXT PART SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad

  53. Anonymous says:

    Is anybody else confused at the end of Ch 10? Does it mean everypony is down or that only Twi and Fluttershy are left but they are somewhere else?

  54. Anonymous says:

    Is anybody else confused at the end of Ch 10? Does it mean everypony is down or that only Twi and Fluttershy are left but they are somewhere else?

  55. @AnonymousThat is the mystery, isn't it?

  56. @AnonymousThat is the mystery, isn't it?

  57. Zackery says:

    No…..no. NO…..NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!PLEASE DON'T KILL ALL OF THEM OFF NOW!THIS STORY CAN STILL HAVE A HAPPY ENDING!GIVE IT ONE NOW!I… beg of you… *crying*

  58. Zackery says:

    No…..no. NO…..NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!PLEASE DON'T KILL ALL OF THEM OFF NOW!THIS STORY CAN STILL HAVE A HAPPY ENDING!GIVE IT ONE NOW!I… beg of you… *crying*

  59. Anonymous says:

    you and your pony licking cliffhangers!!!god damn!and I thought the last one was bad

  60. Anonymous says:

    you and your pony licking cliffhangers!!!god damn!and I thought the last one was bad

  61. Meliadhor says:

    Dear author, you. are. evil. I like the Fitzgerald quote and the things that followed. Though, for a moment I hoped for Alan to appear as a slowly-disappearing humanoid-monster-like (yet fully self aware)creature that would crumble to dust after saving the trio. But again, I really like how you finished his part there. Wonder if he'll appear in the grand finale next to Shadow-Pinkie and Shadow-Applejack? Anyhoof, good work there and I'm waiting for the next update!…..there WILL be new chapters, right? Right?

  62. Meliadhor says:

    Dear author, you. are. evil. I like the Fitzgerald quote and the things that followed. Though, for a moment I hoped for Alan to appear as a slowly-disappearing humanoid-monster-like (yet fully self aware)creature that would crumble to dust after saving the trio. But again, I really like how you finished his part there. Wonder if he'll appear in the grand finale next to Shadow-Pinkie and Shadow-Applejack? Anyhoof, good work there and I'm waiting for the next update!…..there WILL be new chapters, right? Right?

  63. Jake Smith says:

    Well done, I await the finale with bated breath.

  64. Jake Smith says:

    Well done, I await the finale with bated breath.

  65. NinesTempest says:

    @AnonymousTotally not the intention.Regardless, holy shit this is well done. I feel tense, I feel nervous about how it's going to play out. And most of all, I am curious beyond all belief.It's like playing the game again. It's not scary, but it's startling and builds suspense so well. You write almost exactly as Wake wrote, and you have good things going; the hat at the end, the Fitzgerald quote (which probably gives some insight into why writes like killing/hurting Dash, or something), and the prose is just descriptive enough while keeping action at the forefront of events.I knew the second Twilight gave the pendant to Fluttershy that Dash was going to probably sacrifice herself. Yet it still played out so perfectly and not exactly as I expected. That line about the third rainboom happens to also be an exact line in a story I had I think, haha. I don't see it in many stories, not sure why. But it was done perfectly, and not cliche. I almost expected a cliche, but the last three paragraphs of 10 were perfect still.Goddamn keep going.

  66. NinesTempest says:

    @AnonymousTotally not the intention.Regardless, holy shit this is well done. I feel tense, I feel nervous about how it's going to play out. And most of all, I am curious beyond all belief.It's like playing the game again. It's not scary, but it's startling and builds suspense so well. You write almost exactly as Wake wrote, and you have good things going; the hat at the end, the Fitzgerald quote (which probably gives some insight into why writes like killing/hurting Dash, or something), and the prose is just descriptive enough while keeping action at the forefront of events.I knew the second Twilight gave the pendant to Fluttershy that Dash was going to probably sacrifice herself. Yet it still played out so perfectly and not exactly as I expected. That line about the third rainboom happens to also be an exact line in a story I had I think, haha. I don't see it in many stories, not sure why. But it was done perfectly, and not cliche. I almost expected a cliche, but the last three paragraphs of 10 were perfect still.Goddamn keep going.

  67. Skay says:

    Had a feeling Wake would be inserted into the story…that was before I went and rented Alan Wake.Can't wait to see the next (and sadly probably the last) update.

  68. Skay says:

    Had a feeling Wake would be inserted into the story…that was before I went and rented Alan Wake.Can't wait to see the next (and sadly probably the last) update.

  69. Anonymous says:

    There had better be Taken versions of the mane six who "went missing" in the finale. That would be epic, seeing them fight our heroes (if any are remaining, dang you confusing cliffhangers!!).

  70. Anonymous says:

    There had better be Taken versions of the mane six who "went missing" in the finale. That would be epic, seeing them fight our heroes (if any are remaining, dang you confusing cliffhangers!!).

  71. Gummy says:

    Pen Stroke, I can honestly say if I could reach through this computer and shake your hand, I would in a heart beat. I've been a Alan Wake fan since I brought it home to play the day it came out. Now you have brought the two greatest things ever to create this masterpiece, deserving of only the highest praise. You sir are as great a writer as Alan could ever be. This cliffhanger you left us on in chapter 10 left me speachless and will probably drive me to the edge of insanity until you finish the gripping conclusion. We'll just have to wait and see how this all will end.

  72. Gummy says:

    Pen Stroke, I can honestly say if I could reach through this computer and shake your hand, I would in a heart beat. I've been a Alan Wake fan since I brought it home to play the day it came out. Now you have brought the two greatest things ever to create this masterpiece, deserving of only the highest praise. You sir are as great a writer as Alan could ever be. This cliffhanger you left us on in chapter 10 left me speachless and will probably drive me to the edge of insanity until you finish the gripping conclusion. We'll just have to wait and see how this all will end.

  73. zeb516 says:

    This is probally the end… For this chapterRight?

  74. zeb516 says:

    This is probally the end… For this chapterRight?

  75. Banana says:

    Goddamn!That cliffhanger. You enjoy jerking us around don't ya?

  76. Banana says:

    Goddamn!That cliffhanger. You enjoy jerking us around don't ya?

  77. zeb516 says:

    *looks at tags a sighs a relief when it says it's still incomplete* It's alright guys its gonna keep going!*Author changes tag to complete then a day later uploads a chapter*FUUUUUUUUUU

  78. zeb516 says:

    *looks at tags a sighs a relief when it says it's still incomplete* It's alright guys its gonna keep going!*Author changes tag to complete then a day later uploads a chapter*FUUUUUUUUUU

  79. NinesTempest says:

    FuuuuuuuuuuuuuNow I have to read thisLike really right nowbut i'm busyfuck my life

  80. NinesTempest says:

    FuuuuuuuuuuuuuNow I have to read thisLike really right nowbut i'm busyfuck my life

  81. Anonymous says:

    *read chapter 11*YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YESSSSSYES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES

  82. Anonymous says:

    *read chapter 11*YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YESSSSSYES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES

  83. NinesTempest says:

    And then this became one of my top five favorite fictions in the fandom.Goddamnit this is so well done. I'll… try to make a critique tomorrow. But it's hard.

  84. NinesTempest says:

    And then this became one of my top five favorite fictions in the fandom.Goddamnit this is so well done. I'll… try to make a critique tomorrow. But it's hard.

  85. BB says:

    oh you magnificent bastard youit was greatthe whole thingsimply amazing6 stars, up there as one of my favorite fics!

  86. BB says:

    oh you magnificent bastard youit was greatthe whole thingsimply amazing6 stars, up there as one of my favorite fics!

  87. Anonymous says:

    Why, you bastard? Why did you have to end this? It was soooo good, I almost cried at the ending. Darn you and your stupid ending, 'cause I didn't want it to end. Arrghhh, great job!

  88. Anonymous says:

    Why, you bastard? Why did you have to end this? It was soooo good, I almost cried at the ending. Darn you and your stupid ending, 'cause I didn't want it to end. Arrghhh, great job!

  89. Andrew says:

    Oh my gosh this was my favorite fic. An epic of enormous proportions.

  90. Andrew says:

    Oh my gosh this was my favorite fic. An epic of enormous proportions.

  91. Andrew says:

    Oh my God DAT ENDING. DAT ENDIIIIIIIIIIIIIIING.

  92. Andrew says:

    Oh my God DAT ENDING. DAT ENDIIIIIIIIIIIIIIING.

  93. Andrew says:

    I wish it hadn't ended too but I know it had to. XD

  94. Andrew says:

    I wish it hadn't ended too but I know it had to. XD

  95. Andrew says:

    Oh my God this story needs six stars like I need a happy ending for everyone. It also needs someone to do an EPIC VOICE RECORDING of the story. It would be best done in Alan Wake's voice actor though.

  96. Andrew says:

    Oh my God this story needs six stars like I need a happy ending for everyone. It also needs someone to do an EPIC VOICE RECORDING of the story. It would be best done in Alan Wake's voice actor though.

  97. Anonymous says:

    I think we call up Alan Wake's VA and see if he will read this for us. Be pretty exciting, dontcha think? Also I think a fanimation and video game are a requirement here, just sayin'. Anyways, this story was amazing and just seemed canon with the games story. It just feels like it could of happened, but that's probably because the author was awesome enough to be able to write in the same fashion Remedy used for Alan Wake. I love this story and it's probably top, um say, 2 on my list.

  98. Anonymous says:

    I think we call up Alan Wake's VA and see if he will read this for us. Be pretty exciting, dontcha think? Also I think a fanimation and video game are a requirement here, just sayin'. Anyways, this story was amazing and just seemed canon with the games story. It just feels like it could of happened, but that's probably because the author was awesome enough to be able to write in the same fashion Remedy used for Alan Wake. I love this story and it's probably top, um say, 2 on my list.

  99. Andrew says:

    OH MY GOD HOW DO WE CONTACT ALAN WAKE'S VOICE ACTOR? D:

  100. Andrew says:

    OH MY GOD HOW DO WE CONTACT ALAN WAKE'S VOICE ACTOR? D:

  101. Andrew says:

    And I don't know what it would consist of, but sequel please? ._.

  102. Andrew says:

    And I don't know what it would consist of, but sequel please? ._.

  103. Asgard314 says:

    Very, VERY good ending. Tying up loose ends, while having a hopeful outlook on the future, it felt like I was reading the ending for The Shining again! And yes, if someone here, SOMEHOW got Alan Wake's voice actor to agree to read this story and not do it with a tone of boredom and sarcasm, I'll gladly pitch in a good amount of money to pay the man. I just can't get over how good it was!

  104. Asgard314 says:

    Very, VERY good ending. Tying up loose ends, while having a hopeful outlook on the future, it felt like I was reading the ending for The Shining again! And yes, if someone here, SOMEHOW got Alan Wake's voice actor to agree to read this story and not do it with a tone of boredom and sarcasm, I'll gladly pitch in a good amount of money to pay the man. I just can't get over how good it was!

  105. Anonymous says:

    Anon from a little bit earlier here. Sad to say, I was unable to find a way to contact Wake's VA, Matthew Porretta.

  106. Anonymous says:

    Anon from a little bit earlier here. Sad to say, I was unable to find a way to contact Wake's VA, Matthew Porretta.

  107. Andrew says:

    @AnonymousIt's alright, thanks for trying. 🙂

  108. Andrew says:

    @AnonymousIt's alright, thanks for trying. 🙂

  109. Anonymous says:

    Awwww Nyx was freaking adorable

  110. Anonymous says:

    Awwww Nyx was freaking adorable

  111. Anonymous says:

    Dawww…can nyx be canon? you know what im not even asking anymore thats what were doing!

  112. Anonymous says:

    Dawww…can nyx be canon? you know what im not even asking anymore thats what were doing!

  113. Anonymous says:

    And then Nyx made me daw. That was a great story.

  114. Anonymous says:

    And then Nyx made me daw. That was a great story.

  115. Zonn says:

    Daawwwwwnnn….DANG-IT Now I want to Alan Wake… Good thing I just bought a 360. 😀

  116. Zonn says:

    Daawwwwwnnn….DANG-IT Now I want to Alan Wake… Good thing I just bought a 360. 😀

  117. Pen Stroke says:

    Firstly, I want to thank everyone that read, commented, and/or rated Creeping Darkness. I'm glad so many of you enjoyed the story. Now, it's time for some reader feedback. Truth be told, I've fallen for little Nyx, and am currently debating doing so more writing with her as the focus. The question in wrestling with at the moment, however, is should this new story be a side-sequel to Creeping Darkness or a new, stand-alone story? And by stand alone, I mean I would basically take my idea of Nyx and form a completely unrelated story around her. So, to those who actually pay attention to these comments, any thoughts?

  118. Pen Stroke says:

    Firstly, I want to thank everyone that read, commented, and/or rated Creeping Darkness. I'm glad so many of you enjoyed the story. Now, it's time for some reader feedback. Truth be told, I've fallen for little Nyx, and am currently debating doing so more writing with her as the focus. The question in wrestling with at the moment, however, is should this new story be a side-sequel to Creeping Darkness or a new, stand-alone story? And by stand alone, I mean I would basically take my idea of Nyx and form a completely unrelated story around her. So, to those who actually pay attention to these comments, any thoughts?

  119. Jake Smith says:

    Bravo! That was a brilliant ending!

  120. Jake Smith says:

    Bravo! That was a brilliant ending!

  121. Ohh.I want to know what happened between myself and Nyx.How the others reacted.What happened since then,that sort of stuff.Please please please add a second Epilogue.

  122. Ohh.I want to know what happened between myself and Nyx.How the others reacted.What happened since then,that sort of stuff.Please please please add a second Epilogue.

  123. Skay says:

    Really beginning to wonder why this story hasn't earned six stars. Congratulations on finishing this story! And thank you for writing it! (okay, that was lame, even so reading this fic was a real treat)

  124. Skay says:

    Really beginning to wonder why this story hasn't earned six stars. Congratulations on finishing this story! And thank you for writing it! (okay, that was lame, even so reading this fic was a real treat)

  125. Gummy says:

    I just finished reading the last chapters and I have to say Pen I…I…I think I cried a little. I would just like to thank you so much for this, for all of this. I would have never thought that a Alan wake crossover would be the greatest thing I've ever read. So once again from me and many others thank you.

  126. Gummy says:

    I just finished reading the last chapters and I have to say Pen I…I…I think I cried a little. I would just like to thank you so much for this, for all of this. I would have never thought that a Alan wake crossover would be the greatest thing I've ever read. So once again from me and many others thank you.

  127. Gummy says:

    I just saw your comment above Pen and I too fell for Nyx. As for a new story for her, personally I would like to see a side-sequel mostly because of the relationship now between Twilight and Nyx but im confident what ever you choose it'll be fantastic.

  128. Gummy says:

    I just saw your comment above Pen and I too fell for Nyx. As for a new story for her, personally I would like to see a side-sequel mostly because of the relationship now between Twilight and Nyx but im confident what ever you choose it'll be fantastic.

  129. Anonymous says:

    I read all of this in one sitting, tonight. That was so good, I find it a little harder to breathe than before. You took a mind-boggling idea for a cross-over and made it work flawlessly. How do all you writers keep DOING THAT?(Nyx is also adorable. Perhaps a one-shot glimpse into her near-future? Maybe.)

  130. Anonymous says:

    I read all of this in one sitting, tonight. That was so good, I find it a little harder to breathe than before. You took a mind-boggling idea for a cross-over and made it work flawlessly. How do all you writers keep DOING THAT?(Nyx is also adorable. Perhaps a one-shot glimpse into her near-future? Maybe.)

  131. Wayde says:

    GAH! That was one of the greatest things I've ever read. I can honestly say I've never been more captivated by writing than I was during those last couple of chapters. Additionally, you've perfectly captured the writing style of Alan Wake.I'm just a little sad that it's over. 😦

  132. Wayde says:

    GAH! That was one of the greatest things I've ever read. I can honestly say I've never been more captivated by writing than I was during those last couple of chapters. Additionally, you've perfectly captured the writing style of Alan Wake.I'm just a little sad that it's over. 😦

  133. Anonymous says:

    Wow. Pretty awesome. And unexpectedly fast written and completed.Most enjoyable.@PenCurrently I guess most people would like to see a side sequel more instead of a stand alone. Probably because it would be easier to simply go along with it that way.Though a stand alone would certainly be also interresting.And now I am realy wondering how the mother (not Twilight) would react to this.

  134. Anonymous says:

    Wow. Pretty awesome. And unexpectedly fast written and completed.Most enjoyable.@PenCurrently I guess most people would like to see a side sequel more instead of a stand alone. Probably because it would be easier to simply go along with it that way.Though a stand alone would certainly be also interresting.And now I am realy wondering how the mother (not Twilight) would react to this.

  135. Anonymous says:

    I found the official fanpage of the Alan Wake voice actor. Perhaps we can contact him that way:http://www.ldynwaitin.com/matthew/

  136. Anonymous says:

    I found the official fanpage of the Alan Wake voice actor. Perhaps we can contact him that way:http://www.ldynwaitin.com/matthew/

  137. Anonymous says:

    Make a new story about Nyx i love her ❤

  138. Anonymous says:

    Make a new story about Nyx i love her ❤

  139. marcus-riess says:

    Awww, what a sweet ending. I can see Twilight and Nyx right before my inner eye now. I´m normaly not int horror stories, but this one was great. Maybe we will read more of Nyx and Twi.

  140. marcus-riess says:

    Awww, what a sweet ending. I can see Twilight and Nyx right before my inner eye now. I´m normaly not int horror stories, but this one was great. Maybe we will read more of Nyx and Twi.

  141. Anonymous says:

    Amazing ending to an amazing story though i never played alan wake i loved the whole story and the happy end made me happy!

  142. Anonymous says:

    Amazing ending to an amazing story though i never played alan wake i loved the whole story and the happy end made me happy!

  143. Anonymous says:

    Love Alan Wake.Love this story. Easily the best MLP fanfic I've read. I really like how you made it a sequel to the game and not just a replace-character-with-pony thing, it keeps the suspense up. I'm sad it's over and that I can only read it for the first time once.I actually got a 17 year old dude to watch MLP:FIM because of this story.–Mousesquisher

  144. Anonymous says:

    Love Alan Wake.Love this story. Easily the best MLP fanfic I've read. I really like how you made it a sequel to the game and not just a replace-character-with-pony thing, it keeps the suspense up. I'm sad it's over and that I can only read it for the first time once.I actually got a 17 year old dude to watch MLP:FIM because of this story.–Mousesquisher

  145. Banana says:

    @Pen StrokeTotally liking the idea of a side story. The chronicles of Nyx or something of the like.That being said, I enjoyed this story more than I should have, being that I never played Alan Wake before. It made the whole experience unique. Sprinkle in ponies and that'll make the experience uniquely amazing. Always heart warming to see a happy ending in a grim dark story. Totally laughed at the idea of CPR on a pony. Anyways, hope ya write more soon. Cheers

  146. Banana says:

    @Pen StrokeTotally liking the idea of a side story. The chronicles of Nyx or something of the like.That being said, I enjoyed this story more than I should have, being that I never played Alan Wake before. It made the whole experience unique. Sprinkle in ponies and that'll make the experience uniquely amazing. Always heart warming to see a happy ending in a grim dark story. Totally laughed at the idea of CPR on a pony. Anyways, hope ya write more soon. Cheers

  147. Andrew says:

    @AnonymousGood job finding it!

  148. Andrew says:

    @AnonymousGood job finding it!

  149. Andrew says:

    Pen, I want you to do what you think you could do a better job of. If you think you can do a better job with an unrelated story, then do that, but if you can somehow intertwine it into this and make it really good, then do that. I would love to see what you do.

  150. Andrew says:

    Pen, I want you to do what you think you could do a better job of. If you think you can do a better job with an unrelated story, then do that, but if you can somehow intertwine it into this and make it really good, then do that. I would love to see what you do.

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  153. Andrew says:

    Although in all honesty I'd rather have a story that is a side sequel.

  154. Andrew says:

    Although in all honesty I'd rather have a story that is a side sequel.

  155. I'm overflowing with so many emotions after reading that story. Going in I had no idea it would be so wonderfully engrossing. I don't read many horror stories and I never played Alan Wake, but you hooked me in with this exciting story. Thank you so much for writing it.

  156. I'm overflowing with so many emotions after reading that story. Going in I had no idea it would be so wonderfully engrossing. I don't read many horror stories and I never played Alan Wake, but you hooked me in with this exciting story. Thank you so much for writing it.

  157. Anonymous says:

    That was just unbelievably awesome! I read it all in one sitting, and loved it!

  158. Anonymous says:

    That was just unbelievably awesome! I read it all in one sitting, and loved it!

  159. Anonymous says:

    this story was AWESOME loved it i also really like the character Nyx any chance of including her in future stories because that would be great i think her character has potential

  160. Anonymous says:

    this story was AWESOME loved it i also really like the character Nyx any chance of including her in future stories because that would be great i think her character has potential

  161. Batty Gloom says:

    Batty Gloom here and if you don't mind, here is an official answer from the pegasus that's acting as editor and pre-reader to Pen Stroke.So he had a bit of a brainwave. There he was, writing an adorable character, and he thought to himself "Yeah, she's cute, but what can I do to make her better?"

  162. Batty Gloom says:

    Batty Gloom here and if you don't mind, here is an official answer from the pegasus that's acting as editor and pre-reader to Pen Stroke.So he had a bit of a brainwave. There he was, writing an adorable character, and he thought to himself "Yeah, she's cute, but what can I do to make her better?"

  163. Batty Gloom says:

    Batty Gloom here and if you don't mind, here is an official answer from the pegasus that's acting as editor and pre-reader to Pen Stroke.So he had a bit of a brainwave. There he was, writing an adorable character, and he thought to himself "Yeah, she's cute, but what's missing? What is missing?" And he thought to himself a story that explores Nyx as a fully developed character. It's still a work in progress, don't judge him yet. But eventually he'd like to make a story that has an original origin for Nyx that will stand up on its own merits, having Nyx being dynamic. That's what he's aiming for. But, you know, small steps.Oh, and don't bother trying to ask for more information, because it's impossible, okay? I thought of everything.

  164. Batty Gloom says:

    Batty Gloom here and if you don't mind, here is an official answer from the pegasus that's acting as editor and pre-reader to Pen Stroke.So he had a bit of a brainwave. There he was, writing an adorable character, and he thought to himself "Yeah, she's cute, but what's missing? What is missing?" And he thought to himself a story that explores Nyx as a fully developed character. It's still a work in progress, don't judge him yet. But eventually he'd like to make a story that has an original origin for Nyx that will stand up on its own merits, having Nyx being dynamic. That's what he's aiming for. But, you know, small steps.Oh, and don't bother trying to ask for more information, because it's impossible, okay? I thought of everything.

  165. ROBCakeran53 says:

    I gotta say, when I saw this I had no idea what it was. I heard of the game Alan Wake, but never really saw anything of it. After reading this, I had absolutely not choice but to go out and buy the game and two DLC's for it. It was amazing, and this story was just as good! You did a very good job blending the two topics.

  166. ROBCakeran53 says:

    I gotta say, when I saw this I had no idea what it was. I heard of the game Alan Wake, but never really saw anything of it. After reading this, I had absolutely not choice but to go out and buy the game and two DLC's for it. It was amazing, and this story was just as good! You did a very good job blending the two topics.

  167. Anonymous says:

    I first read Past Sins and saw in the comments that Nyx originated here so tried this story out too. Well worth the time spent reading it. I think the characterization of Alan was a bit off, he should have been more of a jerk, but other then that I thought the story was great. I mean, I was mostly in it for Nyx, but the way this story used the whole Alan Wake crazy meta "horror story about being trapped in a horror story" was really interesting.I'd kinda want to see Alan explain this adventure to Alice and Barry. Barry would probably think the ponies would be marketable.

  168. *performs Twilight Sparkle style yes-storm*THAT was a great ending! More stories should end like this!Well, what else could be expected from the author of Better Living Through Science and Ponies, another truly great story with an equally great ending?Pen Stroke, if you read this, please keep writing these wonderful happy endings for your stories, a bad ending always, ALWAYS ruins the entire story for me.It's like, what was I even reading all this shit for when the characters just die in the end? I don't have to experience this here, so thank you! Thank you for writing a worthwhile story!

  169. Pen Stroke says:

    @theuncalledforTrust me, I hate sad endings to. Never finished the Sword of Shannarah fantasy series because of how the second book ended. It was bitter-sweet, but way to much bitter for the little bit of sweet.So, ya, I like the happy endings too.

  170. Zurkoslat says:

    This was amazing and really well done, and as a fan of the game I can't say i was disappointed. It kept me at the edge of my seat and I loved the ending. 6 stars guaranteed.

  171. Anonymous says:

    This works as a Horror novella without taking the cheap way out ("Cupcakes" splatterporn, anyone). Not familiar with Alan Wake, but the building horror up to the climax (with Alan both responsible for initiating it and unsuccessfully trying to stop it) just keeps it driving for the cliff and not stopping. I have sent the link to my writing partner, as he is a big horror aficionado.Including Alan's impression ("Nightmare Moon? Sounds like a villain from a children's cartoon") at the beginning giving way to "Those little ponies gave me back my hope."I wonder if anybody noticed the (probably unintentional) echoes of Medieval Christian symbolism in the story?1) The Dark Place as an archetype of Hell. Specifically, the same archetype Prof. Tolkien used in the Silmarillion — "The Void". The All-Consuming Void. And how it Consumed Nightmare Moon after she split off and discarded Nyx. Turns out Nyx — the only part of Luna remaining in NM — was all that was keeping NM from being devoured and digested by the Dark.2) In Medieval belief, the Unicorn was called "Christ's Horse" and symbolized Purity. And here we have two prominent Unicorns — Twi and Nyx. (Nyx is one of the most endearing OCs I've ever come across; I'm still bent out of shape over what's happening to her in "Past Sins".)3) A "Harrowing of Hell" scene halfway through, where Twi goes deeper and deeper into the Dark and finds Nyx, Descending into Hell and Setting the Captive Free.4) Nyx's two acts of self-sacrifice. The first when Dark/NM is trampling Twi to death and Nyx just charges. Her sacrifice — her light — burns out the Dark Presence in the shell of NM and since NM has been digested by the Dark, all that is left to fill the now-empty body is Nyx.The second is when Nyx sacrifices herself for Twi's Resurrection. Willing to give up everything in exchange so Twi can live again. And in the end, Nyx is also Resurrected, "born again" as a little foal. (Luna's little/twin sister?)Again, as Alan Wake found out at the end, there is a LOT of Depth in these little ponies.Headless Unicorn Guy

  172. Delta Sigma says:

    This is the most powerful story I've read in a little while. Fantastic characterization. I give it five stars, a sun and a full moon. And now I'm on to Past Sins, the sequel. (Kind of, I think).

  173. Anonymous says:

    I was brought here originally from reading Past Sins, considering that's on pause for another week and I had read Nyx's beginnings started elsewhere- namely, here. I was a little critical going in since I have no knowledge of Alan Wake, and I was mostly in it for Nyx. I wasn't disappointed. I'm not a grimdark fan in the slightest, but this story walked the tightrope of grimlight masterfully. It flirts with hopelessness, but never courts it. The writing earns its 6-star status with every typed word. The characters are true to themselves. The events unfold in a believable way. This is the sort of thing with the weight of Tolkien that could be remade into a 2-hour movie. Thoughtful, philosophical, deep, thrilling, and a lesson at the end.Bravo!

  174. Anonymous says:

    6-starsoh and the writer must pay for what he put these ponys trough… just saying

  175. Anonymous says:

    Wait, Nyx is in this story?! The greatest OC pony to ever exist?!*prepares to read*

  176. Colt.45 says:

    This was the first fan fiction I read on here a while back, and even now it is my favorite. As a tremendous fan of the game, I was a bit skeptical about bringing in ponies. I never would have imagined how flawlessly the two universes could combine. It is every bit as suspenseful and gripping as the game, a force of fear and hopelessness which parades the reader through its intense sequences, mercilessly. A TRUE horror, not a sorry slasher excuse. It's that wonderful flow of terror, story, and emotion which makes the story an amazing, satisfying adventure. Thank you.

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