Story: Warden of the Everfree Forest

[Normal] Twilight Sparkle, Ace Detective. That sounds like a pretty cool idea for a comic book. While somepony gets on that, here’s a mystery story for you.

Author: tootaloo


Description:
How does Ponyville remain safe while being so close to the Everfree Forest? Twilight and Spike investigate and come across an old secret.

Warden of the Everfree Forest

Additional Tags: Mystery, Investigation, Everfree Forest, Ponyville, Fight

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40 Responses to Story: Warden of the Everfree Forest

  1. Baree says:

    The idea is interesting. And most of the story works.However, I can just not see Fluttershy killing any animals. I know you address it, sorta, but its still so against her character in the show.Still, its not enough to turn me away from the story entirely.

  2. Baree says:

    The idea is interesting. And most of the story works.However, I can just not see Fluttershy killing any animals. I know you address it, sorta, but its still so against her character in the show.Still, its not enough to turn me away from the story entirely.

  3. Anonymous says:

    Fluttershy just can't kill small animals. I agree, she doesn't really have the conscience to kill any small animal, regardless of the circumstance.

  4. Anonymous says:

    Fluttershy just can't kill small animals. I agree, she doesn't really have the conscience to kill any small animal, regardless of the circumstance.

  5. Anonymous says:

    Once the premise was established, the plot was fairly predictable. That didn't stop it from being awesome, however.

  6. Anonymous says:

    Once the premise was established, the plot was fairly predictable. That didn't stop it from being awesome, however.

  7. Anonymous says:

    @Anonymous you must of not read it then, because she doesn't kill any "small" animals in the story

  8. Anonymous says:

    @Anonymous you must of not read it then, because she doesn't kill any "small" animals in the story

  9. Anonymous says:

    Any sort of animals then.

  10. Anonymous says:

    Any sort of animals then.

  11. NinesTempest says:

    Lol @ seeing comments about Fluttershy killing animals. All I have to say to you guys is: what the flying fuck do you think she is prepared for? And Twilight was there, unconscious. Spike was too. If she didn't do something, that would be two deaths, and as evidence from Dragonshy, we KNOW she doesn't let others hurt her friends. Given her Warden status, I don't remotely see this as out of character.

  12. NinesTempest says:

    Lol @ seeing comments about Fluttershy killing animals. All I have to say to you guys is: what the flying fuck do you think she is prepared for? And Twilight was there, unconscious. Spike was too. If she didn't do something, that would be two deaths, and as evidence from Dragonshy, we KNOW she doesn't let others hurt her friends. Given her Warden status, I don't remotely see this as out of character.

  13. Baree says:

    *Shrugs*I don't know. I just feel there was no reason for it yet. She was using the stare. I will assume that would have worked hadn't she been interrupted. The Warden thing works. I suppose I can even see her killing an animal if it was absolutely necessary.Yet it didn't feel absolutely necessary yet. Not to me.

  14. Baree says:

    *Shrugs*I don't know. I just feel there was no reason for it yet. She was using the stare. I will assume that would have worked hadn't she been interrupted. The Warden thing works. I suppose I can even see her killing an animal if it was absolutely necessary.Yet it didn't feel absolutely necessary yet. Not to me.

  15. Dave says:

    Interesting concept that could easily fall in with the lore. Well done.

  16. Dave says:

    Interesting concept that could easily fall in with the lore. Well done.

  17. Anonymous says:

    @Anonymous I like the way you think

  18. Anonymous says:

    @Anonymous I like the way you think

  19. NinesTempest says:

    @BareeUnconscious Twilight Sparkle and helpless Spike?I'd hate to see what is necessary for you.

  20. NinesTempest says:

    @BareeUnconscious Twilight Sparkle and helpless Spike?I'd hate to see what is necessary for you.

  21. ZettaLux says:

    Fluttershy = Xena. D: BADASS.

  22. ZettaLux says:

    Fluttershy = Xena. D: BADASS.

  23. Anonymous says:

    Mmmmm… Ending was a bit abrupt, but otherwise good.Tell ya what I would have done, though. I would have had Twilight follow Fluttershy obsessively trying to prove she's the warden only to find out in the end she isn't, decide the Warden is all a myth, and then have a stinger with Pinkie Pie suiting up or something.But what we got was good for a nice, light fic. Nothing really wrong with it.

  24. Anonymous says:

    Mmmmm… Ending was a bit abrupt, but otherwise good.Tell ya what I would have done, though. I would have had Twilight follow Fluttershy obsessively trying to prove she's the warden only to find out in the end she isn't, decide the Warden is all a myth, and then have a stinger with Pinkie Pie suiting up or something.But what we got was good for a nice, light fic. Nothing really wrong with it.

  25. A bit grittier than I prefer about of my Pony, but I have to say that the concept of Fluttershy shouldering such a tremendous duty is compelling.

  26. A bit grittier than I prefer about of my Pony, but I have to say that the concept of Fluttershy shouldering such a tremendous duty is compelling.

  27. Anonymous says:

    There's just one thing I can't get over. Well two really:1) "No monsters have EVER attacked Ponyville…" So wait. The Ursa Minor, Parasprites, snoring Dragon, et al never happened?2) The guards in Canterlot patrol the streets. Presumably to deter crime and do law enforcement. These functions are expressly NOT part of the Warden's job. So how is law enforcement done in Ponyville?

  28. Anonymous says:

    There's just one thing I can't get over. Well two really:1) "No monsters have EVER attacked Ponyville…" So wait. The Ursa Minor, Parasprites, snoring Dragon, et al never happened?2) The guards in Canterlot patrol the streets. Presumably to deter crime and do law enforcement. These functions are expressly NOT part of the Warden's job. So how is law enforcement done in Ponyville?

  29. Anonymous says:

    The premise requires the entire village to carry the idiot ball (we live next to a forest full of monsters; let's depend entirely on a single anonymous, unpaid, and possibly FICTIONAL individual to protect us!), and that canon in the series itself be ignored…. Fluttershy didn't intervene with the parasprites, the Hydra, OR the Ursa Minor, and she had to be dragged up the mountain to intervene with the dragon…. which would have meant she was carrying the deception so far that it imperiled her friends and the village she was protecting.It would have worked, ignoring the idiot-ball issues, if it had been some other pony and Fluttershy was just a red herring. Heck, it would have worked if it was Angel the Rabbit. But Fluttershy? nope.

  30. Anonymous says:

    The premise requires the entire village to carry the idiot ball (we live next to a forest full of monsters; let's depend entirely on a single anonymous, unpaid, and possibly FICTIONAL individual to protect us!), and that canon in the series itself be ignored…. Fluttershy didn't intervene with the parasprites, the Hydra, OR the Ursa Minor, and she had to be dragged up the mountain to intervene with the dragon…. which would have meant she was carrying the deception so far that it imperiled her friends and the village she was protecting.It would have worked, ignoring the idiot-ball issues, if it had been some other pony and Fluttershy was just a red herring. Heck, it would have worked if it was Angel the Rabbit. But Fluttershy? nope.

  31. Anonymous says:

    I was hoping to hear it was rainbow dash the entire way through, still it's a very fun read.

  32. Anonymous says:

    I was hoping to hear it was rainbow dash the entire way through, still it's a very fun read.

  33. B. says:

    My major complaint is that "loose" =/= "lose."Every time you used the two interchangably, I was ripped out of the story, and the narrative was interrupted.Other than that it was… nice.

  34. B. says:

    My major complaint is that "loose" =/= "lose."Every time you used the two interchangably, I was ripped out of the story, and the narrative was interrupted.Other than that it was… nice.

  35. Baree says:

    @NinesTempestAn animal greatly suffering and without any hope of making a recovery, I could see that (mercy kill). Maybe, I don't know, something like mad cow disease messing with a hydra. Killing the one animal that is beyond help to save the countless of other creatures it would otherwise kill in its madness. Stuff like that.I can see Fluttershy distracting the basilisk here, luring it away from Spike and Twilight (the creature was already focused on Fluttershy after all). I just feel there were still other options 😛 Heck, as I read I was expecting her to nail the creature to a tree with her arrows or something, then use the Stare.*Shrugs* The Fluttershy from the show would never, ever kill an animal. And I guess I just can't get over that.Anyway, author, this is my personal opinion. I already told you I enjoyed the story, and even if this bothers me I still find it a good read ^^

  36. Baree says:

    @NinesTempestAn animal greatly suffering and without any hope of making a recovery, I could see that (mercy kill). Maybe, I don't know, something like mad cow disease messing with a hydra. Killing the one animal that is beyond help to save the countless of other creatures it would otherwise kill in its madness. Stuff like that.I can see Fluttershy distracting the basilisk here, luring it away from Spike and Twilight (the creature was already focused on Fluttershy after all). I just feel there were still other options 😛 Heck, as I read I was expecting her to nail the creature to a tree with her arrows or something, then use the Stare.*Shrugs* The Fluttershy from the show would never, ever kill an animal. And I guess I just can't get over that.Anyway, author, this is my personal opinion. I already told you I enjoyed the story, and even if this bothers me I still find it a good read ^^

  37. Banana says:

    @AnonymousThis would of been an…interesting take in the story and honestly thought it was headed in that direction.

  38. Banana says:

    @AnonymousThis would of been an…interesting take in the story and honestly thought it was headed in that direction.

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